The Me I Wish to Know.

Every second kills the second that fathered him,
dragging humanity forcefully into a foggy dream,
I know who I was, I know who I am,
Who I am to be in the next second lies ahead of me.

Though, he is who to come but already in memory,
I keep struggling all day to see him comes to reality.
Here I am hustling, facing challenges and difficulties,
not for the man writing this but for him who I am to be.

Like an artist in my hand lies the chisel of my life,
giving to me to carve the statue of that me I desire.
Though, I never knew him but he's there looking at me,
believing that someday, he's going to be a better me.

Author's Note

What do you think about this?

Reviews

[Neville]

I think this is great.. you have penned some exceptional lines and crafted them in such a way as to make a splendid poem....

Neville

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Neville.

[Neville]

you are more than welcome..

[Katrina Mckeown]

I really love the way you portray yourself a boy growing up in this and that you’d like to carve out the future for yourself they way your hopes and desires wish you to be . I’m sure you will be the better you that you wish to be. Very creative write .

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Katrina.

[Katrina Mckeown]

Kay you are most welcome, interesting poem a delight to read.

[HungryGhost]

I love how you embodied the spirit of "who I am is up to me to decide". It's very inspiring!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for understanding this, HungryGhost.
I really appreciate.

[adichie]

The sense of becoming is something you don’t always read about or hear about, but it’s as important as the sense of belonging to our development as people. And here we have one Me who humbly expresses true admiration for the Other Me, the one he will become.

I don’t know about you, but I think the first Me’s a pretty good guy to begin with!!!:):)

This piece is lovely!!!

A

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your kind words and your wonderful review, Adichie.

Your review is amazing!!!

[adichie]

My pleasure.

[Jennifer Patino]

I really like the self awareness of the piece. How you view inner potential & explore the possibilities of uncovering it. Excellent words.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Jennifer.
I really appreciate it.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Every second kills the second that fathered him,

Hear hear! I hear thick applause. From me to you.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Dhara.

[Eilis]

This is an inspiring message, Kay. It shows not only a great sense of self-awareness, but also an understanding of what it takes to become what we desire to be.

The sense of being able to be the master of one’s own destiny—the metaphorical sculptor of our own future—I really appreciate this idea and the potential it attribute to the individual.

I really find this poem uplifting. It’s a bit of a rallying cry for the individual to seek out his best self starting now. Great work.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your wonderful and thoughtful point of view, Eilis.
That's amazing.

[AJNJ]

Keep carving. Something great will emerge.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Pestonjee.

[Lydia Shutter]

We all strive to be the best we can be. The concept of carving a statue of our future selves is unique and so well expressed here. I liked this a lot. Lydi**

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Lydia.

[R.E. Ray]

Kay, I admire the sincerity and humility you express in this poem. Constantly striving to become a better human is an aspiration we share. I think the best of us know they can be a better version of him/herself (not imitate others). And, growth happens in the pursuit, and that’s what shines through in this poem. Another good write.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your understanding, Ray.
You really got me right.

[R.E. Ray]

You’re welcome. A pleasure to read your poetry.