Garden of Paradise

Written with a specific Contest in mind, this poem seeks to portray a tranquil garden or paradise. This is just one of my ideas of Heaven. It is a calm and relaxing place, where visitors can wander with freedom and admire nature's beauty.

In the garden of paradise,

all is nice,

life is free,

from trouble and strife,

 

As the humming-bird sings,

it flaps those wings,

caught in the air,

such beauty is rare,

 

The sparkling waters of a river floweth,

yet where it goes,

nobody knoweth,

 

At the heart of this garden,

is Shangri-lai,

restless souls,

walk here to die,

 

Beauteous flowers,

and April showers,

mystify the mind for hours,

 

At the end of which,

you seek to trust,

your heart to love,

and the passion of lust,

 

With gorgeous angels,

for which you long,

enchant your mind,

with joyous songs...

 

Reviews

[Sasavet]

This really paints a picture of a truly beautiful garden, and in it I see beauty in endings, not only death but in endings.

"At the heart of this garden,
is Shangri-lai,
restless souls,
walk here to die,"

Death here means eternal beauty and bliss, and I feel like that can relate to almost any endings in one way or another. I love this, a lot.

Great job :)

[JelliFyshKissUs]

What beauty lies in your heart to see such tranquility in your mind's eye with such clarity. The senses are galvanized by your words, by the picture you paint with such a delicate stroke. Absolutely paradisaic indeed.

[Jessica]

Beautiful. I loved he imagery. It paints the picture of what I need right now, actually.

[Ama May Cooper]

Such a simply presented piece, filled with a very specfic beauty. I really like this the image printed in my mind makes me long for such a beautiful harmless place

[Livana Lowell]

I get a tie with heaven and a garden and I can view the beauty in my head.

I can feel the serenity from the words that describe the setting so vividly. This really good poem.

[SamBug]

This, also, uses very amazing imagery. I could see everything in my head.

[Jola]

Nice poem :)

[Voice11]

hmm..I really liked the ending, that part flowed nicely. Good job, I like that picture of paradise

[deeps]

Such a wonderful and beautiful write here.

[Raven Wilson]

I love the way this poem flows, light and airy. I can almost feel what i would in such a beautiful place. :)