The Cold Rain and the dark forset

The sky is gray

the ground is wet

the air is cold

 

The wind blows through

hallow trees

blows through my air

 

These frozen rain drops

hits my face

sending sivers down my spine

 

This is a famliar place

this dark forset

speaks to me

 

A safe haven

calling me to come

I walk out

 

Walk into the freezing rain

wind blowing everywhere

I hear sirens

 

I'm in a daze

I can't help but walk

into the dark forest

 

I'm walk to the edge

I've lost my sanity

not a thought in my mind

 

I've lost myself

only thinking about one thing

the forset

 

It's call me

drawing me in

it's a safe haven

 

I go into

the barren woods

look around for signs of life

 

There's no one here

no animals

no plants

 

Then I feel a pain

the voice I heard

was yours

 

You told me

"you wanted me dead"

and you said I would be

 

I lay there

feeling the cold rain drops

I can't move

 

I never thought it was you

I thought I was crazy

I wish I had of stayed

 

Stayed out of that forset

and stay away from you

I start to run

 

I can't see

I have no idea

where to go

 

You grab

from the back

knock me out

 

Take me back

to your place

I scream and yell

 

But no one comes

I wish I had someone

to be my hero

Reviews

[Harry Alston]

Very well put together: the structure adds to it massively, as it makes it far more captivating and easy to read. I like the story telling too - it's something that gets often lost in modern poetry, and I'm glad you have retained a good story.

The escapism provided by the minute imagery of the forest is fantastic; the idea of isolation is portrayed through so few words, great job.

The last line is particularly resonating too.

Good job!

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Steven Cash]

Wow, epic. and chilling

very powerful

95/100

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Chance]

I have walked through barren forests at night--look not for a hero but find solace.
Great read lots to think about I love the escape.

[SouthernBelle]

thanks

[DarrinReay]

Amazing!
i love the last part 'take me back to your place, i scream and yell but no one comes, i wish i had someone to be my hero'

[SouthernBelle]

Thank you

[Wadeon]

Beautiful. :)

[SouthernBelle]

thank you :)

[MissEpic2902]

This was captivating! I couldn't tear my eyes away! Great work!!

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[MissEpic2902]

No problem! :)