Part 1-She's in love with the boy

They were kids

growing up together

in a little bitty town

messing and joking around

 

They were bestfriends

acting like a couple

everyone thought

it was just so cute

 

They got into high school

became sweethearts

on and off again

always lovebirds

 

They planed to get married

have a life

start a family

but her parents forbid it

 

She cried in her room

refused to eat

wouldn't speak

not a peep

 

She packed her bags

called her boyfriend

he pulled up in his pickup truck

and they drove off

 

They moved to West Pheonix

started a family

everyone called them stupid

but they didn't care

 

They were in love

it's easy to tell

but one unlucky night

he went away

 

He went to work

it started to snow

he tried to check a text message

and veered off the road

 

She got a call

He had passed away

she cried and cried

had a broken heart

 

She was in love with the boy

her one true love

she took her own life

so they could be together

 

They spent an eternity

in heaven

they were so in love

and now it show's

Author's Note

This is partly about two ppl in my class. :) Part two is now up

Reviews

[ℰmerald ⚓]

it's a sweet story, good write. I think anybody in her place would've done the same, if I was her and it was I who texted him when he was driving, I would've killed myself from guilt. You should do like a part two about how the kids lived on as orphans!

[SouthernBelle]

i think i will

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad tale in the poem. I like the built-up to the sad ending. I like how they held on to love and the strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[MissEpic2902]

this is amazing!! A true love story if i ever heard one!! :) Bravo!!

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[MissEpic2902]

no problem

[morgann <3]

Its sooo sweet :)

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[SouthernBelle]

That stirred a lot of emotion. Really sad, but beautiful!

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Tex]

ah this is a story... I love that style of poem.

Very well done here. I enjoyed this very much. great development and flow.

I did something similar in my piece "I'll Not Throw In The Towel (lyrics)" but left the end open ended. If you would like to see some one else attempt at a story poem check it out.

High marks from me on this one... I read you other piece as well... I am sorry for your loss.

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Sir Jaykom]

This is like a Shakespearean love tragedy kind of piece. I like it!

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

aaawww i love it

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

your welcome

[Levi Levin]

I like to poem but I can never agree with one taking their own life to be with another. Espicially since in this poem they had a family and a child or children was involved. If thats meant to be it would happen naturally :)

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome friend :)

[Damien Davison]

This is a well written, very sad and heart wrenching write. To go back in time like that, years and years of memory and bonding... I can't even begin to imagine the pain in that... Well, just the tip of the iceberg. Thank you for sharing.

[SouthernBelle]

thank you