Beautiful Ugliness

Looks can be deceiving...

Your eyes shine bright

But your heart is dull

You've got a Hollywood smile

But your words are cold

You are awful.

You have the perfect build

But that's all you work for

You've got a nice touch 

But you only touch your car

You are ugly.

Your hair is soft as silk

But there's no brain in your head

You can make me feel special

But it's all a lie

You are a monster.

You have the perfect family

But you hate them all

And you hate the world

When the world loves you.

You think you've got it all.

Trust me, you don't.

Author's Note

Is there anything I can do to make it better?

Reviews

[Carolynn]

You did a great job with this poem as it cuts right to the chase! I wrote a poem about what we would look like if we were only measured by our deeds and not our outward appearance "in the spirit realm so to speak" Too bad we all couldn't improve that person rather than worrying about the one that will decay with worms soon enough!

[Lady Celery]

Exactly! We put so much emphasis on what we look like that we are defined by our appearances instead of our actions. It's like that old saying goes, "beauty comes from within."

[D Connolly]

You know, I'm a sucker for rhyming, which this doesn't, HOWEVER, I'm learning that poetry is not all about rhyme and meter, and it has more to do with the message and feelings. I love the topic, because I have these same thoughts about those beautiful people (though its not always the case). Some are only concerned with the outward appearance of beauty. I love how you broke it down here, showing that there is so much more to beauty than what is on the outside.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem as-is. Honest and direct. Best use for words. I like the tone and the reason for the poem. We never know what is true or not in most people. Most of us rarely show real face. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Gah Yan]

You make me feel so much better about myself. For awhile I thought I was ugly. You have reminded me that looks aren't everything. I love the simple language and poetic structure

[Lechuza]

I do like your poem. And I also think you don't need anything to make it better, it is great as it is. The last line involves the anger and the rage!

[Angel Veselinov]

Really nice and touching poem. Very good point and nice way of expressing feeling :) Thanks for sharing :) just great

[TTBoy28]

Awful, Ugly, Monster...I really like how you formed everything here. You actually make us thing about True Beauty. Great job!