Mr Smile

Mr Smile

A Poem by Chipgirl

A smile on a sad face...


I can trick the world,

I can fool them even.

The pain you feel inside you,

Will be ignored,

Pushed back,


When the world thinks that you are ok,

You will be breaking inside.

I can set you up into false hope,

When you think you’ll ok,

With my happy gas floating inside you,

You’ll be dead underneath.

But you still use me anyway,

Just to get a few moments of peace,

To feel normal,

To be like everyone else,

To go back before the pain the sadness,

Even though you know,

It’s only a tear away.

© 2010 Chipgirl

Author's Note

This again was thanks to AngelsGreyFeathers for her awesome prompts. Please review and tell me what you think.

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"Everyone thinks I am happy and fine,
But look a little closer
And you'll see tears in my eyes."

Don't you think that quote fits this poem? It's one of my favourites.

Wow, i actually got goosebumps. That was really good, Laura. I liked the idea of letting someone else use you just so they can be happy for a little while - or they can just push away the pain for a moment.
It painted the picture I had in mind when I suggested that prompt. Ouch.
Nice one, mate.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Posted 12 Years Ago

Wow! What an interesting concept! I really liked the idea behind this piece, and thought that it was a really cleverly crafted write. The way you wrote this was so relatable and felt so real, particularly in the way you took such a tough topic yet described it in such a simple and truthful way. Nice work,

Posted 12 Years Ago

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a sad melancholy poem...the title captures the moment really well..well done

Posted 12 Years Ago

Very nice keep up the good work! I like this it's really interesting and tells a lot!

Posted 12 Years Ago

Mr Smile. Once you put the title in perspective, everything opens up perfectly. How a smile changes pretty much everything around us and yet how smiles can be deceptive and could be harboring/ concealing deeper wounds and afflictions. I loved the universal theme behind this one. The apparent oxymoronish relation b/w smiling and sadness. Enjoyed the poem. The pacing , the lines and the message. Wow great write. What a great use of prompts...

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Awesome writing !
I like this, good work!

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Added on November 17, 2010
Last Updated on November 17, 2010



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