Gun Point

Put down that gun

And let me go

Because that mouth’s a gun

And my love is your ammo

When something goes wrong

Or slightly out of order

That questions my loyalty

Then you allow bullets to fly

And you aim them at me

Since your mouth is a pistol

You hold my love tight

The same love you sought to maintain

Became your kryptonite

So please allow me

A few words in between

So we can lower our weapons

Put answers to questions

Love more massive

So neither is held captive

Reviews

[Lavi]

I really enjoyed reading this. It is very true. Although the person holding the gun up and pointed at you makes them feel in control, so the trick in a situation like that and in real life, is to calm them to the point where they don't feel the need to have control. Otherwise, nothing will work and get through to them.

Also, because I am a grammar fanatic:
"Became your kryptonite," I think you meant to put you are, so that would be 'you're'.

[Laurierose]

The "your" was correct here. Thank you for the review, though.

[Kay]

The metaphor of the shooter and victim here is excellent for representing the aggressive verbal dynamic many people experience in some form of relationship (family, friend, partner). I really like the way you ended this poem with "love more massive" than bullets and also expressing that even though one of them is clearly antagonizing, both are "held captive" and need to "put answers to questions" (communicate more effectively) to be set free.

[Laurierose]

With communication comes clarity. Sometimes the simplest thing to do is to just listen. Thank you for the kind review, my friend.

[itsjordan]

verbal assaults can be crippling to anyone. Good poem- Jay

[Laurierose]

Or downright detrimental, I agree. Thanks for the review.

[itsjordan]

your welcome

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Oh man, if bullets we're kisses I think I'd be dead. It's a very wonderful writing. And I think it has inspired me for something. Let us see.

[Laurierose]

Oh my! Well I am definitely interested in seeing what your future writing may hold. Thank you for the sincere review.

[barleygirl]

I completely relate to the idea of using words & mouths as a weapon. You've described this in an unusual & original way, giving the reader time to think between each of your well-crafted accusations & pleading for a better way to communicate. This appears to be written about a romantic situation, but it can also apply to any of today's conversations where people seem to revel in telling another person off (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Laurierose]

Thanks so much for the review, friend!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Verbal assaults can be more damaging and last longer then physical abuse.
I don't tolerate either. If this is something you lived with I hope you got out.

[Laurierose]

It's more so metaphoric. I wanted to embody a very toxic verbal situation. Thank you so much for the review.

[θεά]

Ah! What a relatable piece! Of confrontation and appealing the other to put their ammo and guards down. And so vital and urgent to know what's in the other person's heart too. Very clearly portrayed.

[Laurierose]

Thanks so much!