Children of Abraham (A Message For Moshe)

Children of Abraham (A Message For Moshe)

A Poem by Legion
"

Through tears, something for the two year-old child found sitting by his dead parents with their blood soaking into his pants that were killed in the horrible Mumbai attacks. May God or Allah or whoever the hell is in charge have mercy on us all. :(

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Children Of Abraham

(A Message for Moshe)

 

 

 

Moshe,

May you grow to understand

That all the children of Abraham

Have failed in their Father's eyes.

Each,

By their own design,

Believe that their way to be divine

And death for those they despise.

Think

Before you retaliate.

Fail to emancipate

The hatred that you will grow into.

Peace

Must come from within

Before you can begin

To relinquish the anger that you will hold onto.

Beget

Not the pain foolish, prideful men created

As they changed your innocence, now faded.

Leaving your parents' blood running cold.

Stop

And spread no further distress.

This cycle you must repress

When the urge to strike back takes hold.

Moshe,

Let Abraham sleep peacefully.

Do not live your life vengefully.

Remember always, but do not react.

Teach

His children and show them humanity

And perhaps someday, through your humility,

You will give them what they've forgotten back.

 

 

Legion

1DEC08

© 2008 Legion


Author's Note

Legion
And yet, somehow I see the cycle continuing!

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Before you retaliate.

Fail to emancipate

The hatred that you will grow into. AMEN!!

this is a wonderful & moving work..I love the message of it all!


Not the pain foolish, prideful men created

As they changed your innocence, now faded.

Leaving your parents' blood running cold. Very chilling.

excellent.

Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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This is really beautiful how you wrote this and what an important message you are sending. I wish more people thought this way.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

may your path be blessed

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is strong, bitter truth. Taught gently to an unfortunate child. I'm a child of Abraham, and many indeed have failed in our Father's eyes, so did I. Your poem has left me in a few quivers and tears, and so much to reconsider and rearrange. I am grateful. May peace be with you. 100/100.

-youoweyoupay.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is powerful writing. i love it that it reads as a personal letter to a grief stricken child, a true innocent victim of the atrocities of war. I can justifiably see a child like this grow up to be angry and resentful, a heart full of rage and revenge.....but you show a better way. it reminded me of the teachings of Gandhi.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was wonderful. You describe, no you plead, to stop the cycle of endless "eye for an eye." These wars have gone on forever, fighting for territory, religion, land, dominion, etc.. It is a sad testimony to the nature of man.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Of course the cycle will continue. Few people can forget such atrocities and few groups of people are able to do so, as proven by the hoards driven to vengeance by selfish, power-hungry politicians (even if they call themselves freedom fighters, servants of God, and deny political motive). Your words are good advice and put into a well-crafted poem. The use a several single word lines to empasize certain points is very effective: think, peace, beget, stop, teach are much more effective when standing alone than when lost in a complex line. And, the appelation, Moshe, is effective as well, anchoring the poem to a place and personalizing it. Good work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This piece profoundly touched me.

I keep hoping my messages of tolerance and peace will become something no one can not inhale.
What a powerul and beautiful message.

Thank you..


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice, once again, Legion. You are very right. All of the followers of Abraham have largely failed in a fair judgment of the people. Religion was never supposed to be a matter of oppression. So sad.

Great work,
Gabe


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The cycle continue, but unfortunatly not becuase poor Moshe (Or Moshi as his parents used to call him), its becuase the hate of others, others that dont believe your religion, it can be jewish, or others, that doesnt really matter for the fanats, once you dont believe in they own fate , you should be gone. I am not optemistic like you do, it doesn't matter if children will raise into peace (As my children). if the other side only want to dismiss and kill ... Moshi's parents were beautiful souls, seak for peace, manage the "Habad House" , tried to spread Love and peace, welcome any guest in their house , prayed, never hurt anyone, and still , they were murdered only from one reason , they were diffrent, they were Jewish.

Yous poem is beautiful and full of hope, we must keep that hope, I am sure Moshi will choose the peace way , he is part of Habad , he will continue the tredition of his parents, that were murdered toghther ... when he was only 3 YO ... thank you for posting , Yossi

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Excellent:) I think organized religion has been used over the centuries to justify the evil part of our nature rather than transcend. I mean you can burn people alive, crash planes into buildings, burn priceless peices of art, throw people in deep lakes with weights tied to them to see if they float, and persecute people who are different just so long as you claim god told you to do it. And organized religion is good for society how? Now i don't think its a bad thing to have spiritual beliefs, i myself have them very strongly BUT spiritual beliefs only make sense if they are personal. If you are seeking it individually that suggest enlightenent but if you are seeking it through the mob that suggests desperation. This was very well written and it had a very important message keep up the good work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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