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Stone Park Ritual

Stone Park Ritual

A Poem by Legion
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An intro piece I wrote for a friend of mine in a band called Stone Park Ritual. Check there page out on Facebook if your musical tastes tend toward the metal side.

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Stone Park Ritual



Tread lightly within this hallowed park

And listen for sounds deemed spiritual,

For these standing stones sing haunted songs.

Thus, a requiem for our ritual.


Feel the cadence of decadence

Played beneath these marbled monuments.

Measures syncopated by the worms

That find unity in this movement.


A euphony of cacophony!

Macabre, melancholic melodies

Rendered by a legion relentless.

This mournful legato...their legacy.



Legion

30APR12 (completed)

© 2012 Legion


Author's Note

Legion
Seriously, check them out.

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I love the feel of this, the internal rhymes, the play on words and sounds to create the feeling of both silent ritual and grating noise of metal music. My only critique would be that the first stanza sets up a beautiful form / scheme and it isn't continued in the rest. Though one could argue that it was intentional to continue the feeling of run away music.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I love the feel of this, the internal rhymes, the play on words and sounds to create the feeling of both silent ritual and grating noise of metal music. My only critique would be that the first stanza sets up a beautiful form / scheme and it isn't continued in the rest. Though one could argue that it was intentional to continue the feeling of run away music.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dark, strongly written and highly lyrical. Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This has sort of a rock and role feel to it. Its very rich, dark and deep. I like the last stanza in particular with the alliterated phrases and the talk of their legacy. I think that is a nice touch. This would be a killer opener indeed. I think I will give them a look!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh Dream Theater like already when I hear the word "Hollow" lol
Amazing write. So full of awareness, transience and rotten beauty.
I loved it. Dear poet. Isn't life fragile? and same time so strong?

E.L.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Legion

8 Years Ago

Yes indeed. "Images and Words" :)

8 Years Ago

m/ ♫ :D
This would make great song lyrics so I will check the band out. Very well written with great vocabulary.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dea Legion,

Nice. Tight. Some great lines. Loved the first stanza--the whole thing. A powerful start.

Very best regards,

Rick

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I write about various topics. Mostly I write poetry/songs. I took my screen name from a concept album/epic poem I wrote years ago titled "Legion's Legacy: Tales of the Damned" which was inspired by .. more..

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