Tears in the rain

Crying in the rain,

Hides ny pain.

Nobody can tell,

How hard I just fell.

He left with no goodbye.

So in the rain I now cry.

I let the rain wash away my tears,

Just as much as my fears.

I will always remeber the day,

I watched you drive away.

 

 

Reviews

[Skye]

Its a beautiful poem, though very sad.

[Rhea752]

Sadness.

[FelicityAllona]

i felt sad T_T

[外人 (Gaiji..]

:( So sad !!
You know, i guess from all the poets in this website, you're the one that master pathos the most, all your poems come from deep in your heart and we can see it, you're not afraid to show your feelings and you put them in the spotlight more than any technical element or the will of telling a story, you let your feelings be the story, that's great !
I'm so sorry but if he walked away it means only one thing, he doesn't know the beautiful and amazing person he's missing :)

[Seanne Tholltree]

it's painful to see the one love leaving without even saying a single goodbye...

[CHRIS ANDES]

wow, pain of goodbyes
love it, =]

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I have to point out the mistake in the second line: instead of "ny" it should be "my".
This poem feels lyrical due to its rhythm - I even imagined it as a rap song.
Even though it's hard not to feel sad, one should try to move on for their own sake.
Good write.

[hopelessromantic]

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

[Amelie]

Like an arrow that traveled straight in less than a nano second to the chest. Just like that.

[ROSALIND]

I know, how You feel But God watches over us if You just give your heart, believe