Choke On Your Own Blood

Just some thoughts.

They say the end is just the beginning.

        Why do i fell i began where you left off?

Maybe the end was when I let you in.

I'm begining to see.

Can you see me?

I'm drowningin a sea.

See my thoughts, they're sinking me.

...And I hear you

We're all waiting for you,

watching you.

Make the first move

I dare you to

Do you know what you're getting in to?

See why I hate ?

You made me this way

We hate everything we see,

Because we're afraid to love.

Love me!

Why won't you trust me?

We love to hate

And we hate to love.

and I want to...

I want to love you.

We created something we all hate.

                                                

                                                                                        And I love you!

Reviews

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

I really loved the format the scattered effect although did prove difficult to read but that doesn't take anything away from the content very well written thank you for sharing

98/100

[Nothing Personal]

Interesting format, Scattered thoughts ( literally) , Something to think about, Definitely good stuff

[trainwreck]

I forgot how amazingly fantastic the rewrite was. I love this poem. I'm sorry I'm didn't review it.
Anyway, I love the exchange of every line. This is beautiful.
"See why I hate,
You make me this way."
Its really lovely.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow, this was a really good poem!! It's like all of these thoughts scattered inside the mind of what once was. I could feel everything here, and even the heartbreak. Great work! Oh, and my friend, Juli, had reccommended me to ya hehe, and i just wanted to say hi lol. But, awesome work here. Welcome to the Cafe!! :)

M.