Creepers

Annoying people trying to hit on you?

Creeper me this

and creeper me that

why must you stare

stare from the black. 

Where are your friends

where is your life,

why must you cause

cause me this strife. 

Don't tell me I'm perfect

don't tell me I'm great,

you don't even know me 

don't say that it's fate. 

You're half my own age

and you act to the part,

why don't you go 

before I tear you apart. 

Stick to your friends

or stick to your knife,

what ever your choice 

stay out of my life. 

Author's Note

If you have creepers that wont don't seem to ever leave you alone, read request this to all your friends and lets see if we can get the message across to the people of writerscafe.

Reviews

[Dewella~Vintella]

This was perfectly done. XD I think it gets the message off perfectly, especially "Stick to your friend, or stick to your life."

It had the edgy feel of telling someone to get lost, and also the annoyance and insult that comes with the aspect. Perfect perfect, is all I have to say. ^^

Vinny~

[Libby McKeown]

The heart and precision of the emotion here is good, but telling someone to get lost in a sing-song way undermines the impact in a big way. It's like being mad and ridiculous at the same time. The last stanza has potential, but overall this poem really needs a lot of work to be taken any kind of seriously.

[Omegax45]

I don't get the last part myself, but I think the poem was nicely done.

[SinnerInspired]

Damn this is so cool:
Creeper me this
and creeper me that
why must you stare
stare from the black
favorite lines

[ShadowOfTheDay]

Hahaha this was written really well and I think you got your point across perfectly(:

[Caleb Pendleton]

I like the poem but I'm not sure if i agree with the theme. Good work but it's kinda shallow to mean to those who like you. It's not their fault.

[DreyaArt]

this was so good, simple but good, ive been followed before when walking home from like work and stuff, now i dont like walking alone, wish more people would read this. thanks for writing.

[Chelsea.]

Creepers are becoming quite the problem thesedays :/
But nicely done, aha.

[Daytonight]

I have found several creepers on various sites so I totally relate! Keep on penning.

[Thea]

I really love the last part..."Whatever your choice, stay out of my life." :)))
Nicely done!

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Cold!
So cold!
I love it because it goes straight to the point and the part that made me laugh was the last stanza,
"Stick to your friends
or stick to your knife,
what ever your choice
stay out of my life. "

Absolutely brilliant!