Tepid

Oh the wonders of a bubble bath!

Artwork by Sophie Schubakoff

Twas a bit of a jarring juxtaposition
nearly perfect

           certainly not virtuous
ripples of you

undulated across the surface of my skin
a scuttlebutt of delicious gossip
in which I aspired to be the leading lady

 

Your name escaped my moistened lips
as the bubbles burst
but by then I felt certain
         the bath water would never feel tepid

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

oh my goodness girl!! I didn't know whether to giggle with delight or play with the bubbles and ripples... wheeeew.... "scuttlebutt of delicious gossip" has to be one of the most amusing, clever, and creative phrases I have had the pleasure of reading.. that is a masterpiece in and of itself... what a slow sensual teasing that has just enough playfulness in it... I really enjoyed this one... I am almost certain that the mirror is definitely fogged up in there:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Smiling here...yup, very steamy. Thank you so much, April. It is easy to see why your name is consistently in the top reviewer list. Lydi**

[AprilRN1210]

well, ha.. never thought of it.. I just try to leave an honest, genuine, thoughtful review on other's work.. If I can't do it, how do I expect anyone else to?... southern manners run deep:)
it is always a pleasure... (honestly)

[Lydia Shutter]

You are a sweetie....thank you.

[B.J]

Your writing makes me smile, I found your writing yesterday and it stuck in my mind. Happily

[Lydia Shutter]

I am happy it did. Thank you. Lydi**

[B.J]

you're welcome

[Norah]

I love this poem very much, it is playful and sensational! Great write :D

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks very much, Norah. Lydi**

[Sheila Kline]

Ah, a sensual and teasing bath laden with bubbles ready to burst but not without a rippling of delight in which you fancy yourself to be the leading lady - love the phrase "scuttlebutt of delicious gossip" - just makes the bath interlude even more saucy!! The water might be tepid but the bath is "HOT"!!

Love it and the image is especially perfect for your words!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Sheila. I take a lot of time to find the right artwork to match my words. Lydi**

[Sheila Kline]

And it shows........you never fail to disappoint!! I absolutely love this one - wouldn't mind having a copy of it!! She looks like Marilyn Monroe!

[Lydia Shutter]

I think she might be....although the graphic name does not say.

[DJ]

Baths will never be the same,wonderful write.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much. Lydi**

[Matching Socks]

Oh my goodness, Lydi I love this one baby, just love it!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Ana. Lydi**

[TL Boehm]

Elegant and playful - Its not even "naughty" - just wonderfully penned. I want to go out and buy a box of Mr Bubble but I'm not sure the husband and I would both fit in the tub.

[Lydia Shutter]

:) Thank you, Tammy. Love the idea of Mr. Bubble! :) Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

Time for a big goofy grin...you had me at 'jarring juxtaposition' my friend...and 'nearly' perfect...I love that...where's the fun in perfection after all? There has to be some leeway for experimentation...this poem has that effect too...there's a lot of leeway here...you establish a setting then you exit ever so subtly, leaving the reader (the male one anyway) with a most sultry mental picture and a prickled imagination...you are definitely a leading lady in the poetic realm of sensuality...well done Lydi :)

[Lydia Shutter]

thank you so much, Steve. I am sure I will walk a little taller today when I leave the house! I so appreciate this review. Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

As you should :) Always a pleasure my friend.

[Rene Salinas]

I am of heavy personality and a heavy presence and what guided me are the way the words are put together to create meaning. I found it very clever. Defining that two things will have to be put together to cause a contrasting effect sometimes gets lost. So then it threw me one way with "nealry perfect" and then the opposite way "certainly not virtous". As well as the language then is the image painted with liquidity of forms and unity in sensuality and musicality. Only to leave me with again a very imaginative thought of bubbles elevated in memories of the moment.

Imaginative thinking

Thankyou

[Lydia Shutter]

I do enjoy playing with words and giving them meanings that perhaps are not quite the norm. Glad you enjoyed...thanks for telling me! Lydi**

[Troy Henson]

This was playful Lydi. A bit of spice on my Sunday night in as the rain pours outside. Nicely done my dear.

Troy

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Troy. Lydi**

[Tom]

Romance of a risqué nature quite often results the greatest thrills !

A stimulating, effervescent treatise for the weekend Lydia !

[Lydia Shutter]

Hiya, Tom. Hope you get to play or watch Cricket this weekend. Thanks for the review. Lydi**

[Tom]

I did today Lydia, got three wickets so very pleased with myself....even though we lost !! Lol...

[Lydia Shutter]

Glad you did a good job....and had fun. That is what counts!

[Tom]

Touché Lydia !