Humaness

artwork -- Modigliani reproduction

The night expanded
to fit my container of emotions
                    I fell in love with the sound

A breeze on its way to certain oblivion
ran through the folds of my skirt
                    I fell in love with the feel

A trail of tears evaporated
and was quite impossible to follow home
                    I fell in love with the sight

Words tumbled through my psyche
winning gold medals for my country
                    I locked the container of my mind tightly
lest I be blinded by the melee
of excruciating humanness

Reviews

[barleygirl]

There are so many ways your message states the most imaginative concepts, I'm without words to comment adequately. First, I love the way each of your stanzas highlights one of the physical senses. But the descriptions in the first two lines of each stanza defy expectation to the nth degree! Each part of your message summons a dozen ideas before landing on one that fits best.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Barley! Lydi**

[paddy d daly]

Humanity can be such a Lovely thing
At times, this poem touched me in a
Way that l cannot explain...so nice Lydia.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Paddy. Glad it touched you. Lydi**

[jesserose99]

the whole poem has imagery that sweeps me away to another world right here on earth. So thought provoking that line 'excruciating humanness', and how magical that world really is when you 'tumble through the psyche' of one human poetess. You clearly have a strong connection to your spirit. Unbelievable again Lydia. Your beauty shines through your poetry.

[Lydia Shutter]

How kind of you, JesseRose. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[redzone]

sometimes Lydi, I look around and wonder, are we human? Is there "humaneness", can we truly rise above those "trail of tears" that just leave ruts on our cheeks and fill oceans? and then I read a poem that is both beautiful in its humanity and sad at the same time... and there is hope even in our "excruciating humanness" or maybe because of it... and we poets have a lot to say in this regard I think, as you are doing with your poem... your words took me in perhaps a different direction than you intended Lydi, but none the less it's a humannessly (is there such a words??) "nice" poem..

redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

Curt, when you review a poem of mine, it becomes more human....really. Your interpretation of my thoughts is always valid and very much appreciated. Most of all, it is always "nice"...and, yes, human. Thank you so much. I hope you are doing well. Don't eat too much turkey today! Lydi**

[redzone]

me eat too much turkey!!?? gobble gobble gobble... lol... I am basically okay, with family and there will be LOTS of turkey, including the "human" kind and stuffing too!!! ;0) Hope you are also doing well Lydi... Curt

[Lydia Shutter]

And plenty of hot air to go along with it I am sure! Human turkeys...absolutely! You always make me smile, my friend. Lydi**

[cycy]

beautiful poem dear, i enjoyed going through this one. great read for a lovely friday morning like this one. haven't been around for a while so late reviews all round but will definitely enjoy going through everything i have missed out on :) :)

[Lydia Shutter]

I am sure you did not miss many of mine. I have not been around lately either! Thanks for stopping by. Lydi**

[Jimmy Yetts]

You've said it all so creatively--so uniquely.
I can only offer well-deserved kudos for a decidedly brilliant piece!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Jimmy. Lydi*

[Kelsey Ann]

You have a talent for writing, that is for sure. What a great piece! I fell in love with the words :D

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Kelsey Ann. Lydi**

[Trace]

When I grow up I hope to be able to write just like this.
This is really great stuff.

Trace

[Lydia Shutter]

You? Grow up? C'est impossible! :) Thank you, my friend. Lydi***

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

As humans, we feel in love with everything beautiful in our senses...even small things.
As a poet, I always fall in love with beautiful words, and beautiful pieces.

This is a beautiful piece. I love this!

[Lydia Shutter]

As poets, we see the world just a little bit differently than the rest of the world....may we always fall in love with words. Thank you, Dh! Lydi**

[Desert Knave]

Humanness can indeed be excruciating. Hanging on to little moments ... breezes, the smell of coffee ... those little things make humans bearable. Nicely done. ~Jim

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Jim. Lydi**