vibrant

i’ve painted it all for you in vivid colors

no pastels or muted tones here

listen for the gentle echo of fingertips on keys

subtleties are not in attendance here

nor are they welcome

coffee house napkins become origami in just the “write”light

can you feel them doing a salsa grind?

crimson stained paper cups

elicit all sorts of connotations

this ain't no java jive

take a sip

don’t be shy

tell me what you see

this is the art of my life

and it's yours to share

so please take my hand now

let me take you sailing 

through my vibrant sky

Reviews

[redzone]

Jim said it, "jump right off the page" grabing you by the hands and shows you how to "sail/ through my vibrant sky"... no pastels, prime colors, primeval "connotations" and and and my "nice" sigh... Lydi I want some of what you are drinking, just a small sip from that "crimson stained paper cup"... some zooming expresso "write" to your poem... that's a double "nice"... thanks Lydi..

redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

A double shot of "nice"....not sure I can handle that! :) Thanks so much, Curt. Your reviews mean a lot to me and always have. Lydi***

[highonwords]

i like this poem a lot - the flow is very smooth, like full cream milk smooth - hope to read more like this from you

steph

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you. Lydi

[Ruth]

You are an amazing writer Lydi...all swirls in the world of your writing and leaves me in awe :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Coming from you, a poet whose work I admire, that means so much. Thank you, Poppy. Lydi**

[Jimmy Yetts]

Starkness of senses beautifully portrayed.
Reality as recorded by an artist high-on-life.
One profoundly loving invitation, Lydi!

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, I am high on life....I cherish it and know how important every second is. Thank you, Jimmy. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

I'm sailing through your vibrant words and colors. Beautiful poetry makes the journey worthwhile. Vibrant...:).................

[Lydia Shutter]

Hiya, Sami. Always happy to see a review from you, old friend. Thank you. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly.....:)))))

[barleygirl]

WOW! Do I love your writing! This is a perfect example of what I've been telling "the kids" (on this website) constantly: USE VIVID IMAGERY! SHOW DON'T TELL! These lame declarations of mine do not help a young writer as much as reading something like this. This is how it's done. I love the sensation of total abandonment with which you describe everything around you. I love the way some of your descriptions leave room for the reader's imagination ("crimson-stained cups"). I also love the way you inject your own playful personality ("this ain't no java jive"). I could go on & on, but the sunshine is beckoning me outdoors.

[Lydia Shutter]

Enjoy your day in the sunshine, Barleygirl! I so appreciate your wonderful review. Leaving a lot to the imagination is what good poetry is all about. The reader has to identify and bring his or her own thoughts to the poem. Lydi**

[Nigel Newman]

Lydia Hi. I like browsing on WC, and this is where I've landed! I found this a real joy. Other comments have also touched upon a painting analogy, and I go with that as it's the whole that makes me smile. There are some fabulous phrases 'let me take you sailing through my vibrant sky' 'this ain't no java jive' for example, but for me it's the whole that makes it so enjoyable to read. And I totally agree about people-watching in coffee shops.

I was a little unsure about 'listen for the gentle echo ...' as this seemed at first to be actually quite subtle and muted, and thus at odds with what was said above and below. My take now is that you pointing out the range of activities and sounds is a little like someone like Van Gogh using some deft highlights almost to emphasise the vibrancy of the whole. Forgive me for asking, but should 'yours to share' be preceded by either 'it's' or 'is' rather than 'it', which looks to me like a typo.

Thanks for sharing - a very enjoyable read!

Regards
Nigel

[Lydia Shutter]

You're absolutely right....it was a typo....and I thank you for finding it. I have corrected it. You understand my words as they were intended, Nigel...and I appreciate your review so very much. Lydi**

[h d e rushin]

I've told you this before Lydia and I don't want to sound like a person who sits around repeating things
over and over. But when I don't feel my best, and when my thoughts aren't the best, and I've looked hard in the mirror and don't look my best, I find a poem of
yours and all is made better...

dana

[Lydia Shutter]

Dana, you are a sweetie. Thank you so much. Lydi**

[Miss Marlette]

A very deep and beautiful poem for me.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much.

[Miss Marlette]

You’re welcome

[B. Boileau]

A Renoir of poetry. Pleasing the eyes, warming the heart,tempting the soul.
Ah to sip from the cup of caffinated connotations. A truely wonderious write. Thank you Lydi for sharing the art of your life

[Lydia Shutter]

"Caffeinated connotations"....what great alliteration and creativity in that phrase. You ought to use it in a poem! Thank you so much for your review, Bill. Lydi**

[Sheila Kline]

I have a feeling that sailing adventure will lead straight into a red hot sunset.........oooh, la la!
The salsa grind is chili pepper, burn the house down kind of mixing! Love it, no shyness here, just plain unadulterated passion! (those two cups of coffee must be steaming right out of the cup...LOL)

[Lydia Shutter]

Sitting in a coffee house people watching always helps me write. Thanks so much for the great review, Sheila. Lydi**