A Syllable Away

artwork by Andrew Atroshenko

Let us rendezvous

in the space between the lines

where the celibacy of a sonnet

will shield us from inquisitive eyes

When the coast is clear

we will climb the mountain of words

till we reach the summit of serenity

There, poised on a poem,

I shall inscribe my desires on your hungry heart

 with only the firmament as witness

You see, my darling,

it is all but a syllable away

 

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

"A syllable away
I can make your day
You can make me sway
Then sadness will fly away"

Anything can happen in the magic of a syllable that you used to hear from someone dear. I remember these words from a verse I have read long time ago :
" you captured me
explored everything in me,
every inch of me,
not by your hands
but by just few words"

This is superb, Lydi. Another elegant poem from you. Kudos!

[Lydia Shutter]

Dh, I am always happy to see a review from you on my page. Thank you so much. Lydi**

[Kelly Scheppers]

Between "the celibacy of a sonnet", and "the summit of serenity", I found a syllable most suitable for both...the exclamation of a sigh!

...awe!! What a gorgeous litany of love this is, Lydia!

[Lydia Shutter]

"litany of love"....love that line! Thank you so much, Kelly. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

You really know the craft of words related to romance and everything it means, Lydi. When i read your finely displayed words and graphically clear phrases there's a sense of sweet but knowing achievement in every stanza Perhaps it's perfection!

[Lydia Shutter]

Nah, never perfection, but always striving towards that goal. Thank you so much, Emma. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

'Nah'... that made me laugh, Lydi...makes me feel that my sometimes Darzet (Dorset) language is acceptable. Sweet words..

[barleygirl]

This is a delightful play on the duality of writing & loving. You are master at choosing a whimsical viewpoint & then carrying it all the way thru your message without wavering (no mixed metaphors!), as you've done here. There are many beautifully-crafted phrases: "celibacy of a sonnet" . . . "summit of serenity" . . . "firmament as witness." Your gracefulness is at an all-time high in this write.

[Lydia Shutter]

Curtsying here. Thank you so much, Barley. I always appreciate your lovely reviews. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Perfectly executed, stylistically as well as literally. A really outstanding spot of romanticism and sensuality.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, KL. Lydi**

[B. Boileau]

I love it when you make woo with words. You are the best !

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Bill. Lydi**

[Bacchus]

This is superb.
the celibacy of a sonnet... genius
One of my favorites-
it captures so much.

[Lydia Shutter]

Bacchus, thank you so much for this lovely review. Lydi**

[Érenn]

This is exquisite, in terms of both the style and your word choices. I love this unique breaking of verses here. Not to mention clever metaphors present in this write. There are good alliterations present throughout the poem. Very very romantic I must say. There is a certain sense of rhythm in this poem which I believe is the reason why this piece rocks for me. Also the font card is played nicely.

But then again if love was never that easy.....The build-up is something most are able to achieve, even get most of the words right as well. But it's all about hitting the final nail in the coffin. Sometimes it's a swing and a miss, but other times it's the swing itself that is amiss. ^^ So not an easy task after all ^^

Thank you for sharing ^^ I like it much ^^

[Lydia Shutter]

I appreciate your review so much, Erenn. Thank you. Lydi**

[redzone]

I love all your syllables Lydi, they always like the way between the lines and make me smile..

But you do know that sonnets are not celibate.. they are like rabbits, you can never have just two and if you close your eyes, well there are thousands in no time... sonnets are just too rambuncious.. er..

When i get home i have a Friday night haiku...

I love your poems every and any day... they bring fantasy alive in syllables!!! not to mention nicelious...;0)

redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

Curt, your reviews always leave me smiling. Just like the tribbles....they keep on reproducing, eh? Nicelious....now THERE's a word I have not seen before. You need to start your own dictionary, Curt! :) Thank you very much for the great review. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this feels so emily dickinson to me...love the "summit of serenity" "the celibacy of a sonnet"

damn...so romantic...but love is so hard to put into words...we get close, very close...but that elusive syllable that will complete the word...very hard to find.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

It is a lifetime quest. Thank you so much, Jacob. I always appreciate your reviews. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lydi, a most endearing poem...
You can almost touch the clouds.
The romance is exquisite and irresistible.
truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Sweet Pat...thank you so very much. I was beginning to think no one would ever review this one. I appreciate this. Thank you. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

I think it is an incredible poem.
A Victorian rendezvous between the lines.
A Friday night mystery with exciting
overtones of pleasure.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you again, my friend.