i Want

i Want

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

“There is an ocean in the middle of the forest.” “Say what, now?” “An ocean! In the Forest, right in front of you! See? There’s a whale! A whale!” “Oh wow,”

i Want
i want your eyes to speak as
hands that grace lilting southern magnolias ...a
tensile tenuto .... a
leaving of finger tips  stars tracing
i want
hot cocoa and ground red pepper
your hair alive with
emeralds  streaming seaside pearls
that sacred place
i want 
breath to my life 
and drinking
each from one dawn to another
impaling our thoughts ..........a
soul quenching,  wanting  thirst 
i want you.
E.
11/29/2019

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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I really like the way you mix ideas here. The sensual alongside symbols of comfort. The emeralds and hot cocoa (albeit spicy :D). These juxtapositions speak to me of a greater depth than just a physical want. The soul wanting another soul intertwined with it perhaps.

Sometimes it’s not possible to get close enough. There are distances even in closeness that make it difficult to feel a complete sense of satisfaction.

But your poem reaches. That tenuto is inspired. What a lovely way of thinking about it. Musicality and stopping time to hold on. At least that’s how it shakes out in my head.

This is lovely work, E. Love and desire do create beautiful landscapes in the head-heart. When we step back and let them speak without fear.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

your review hits every note Ellis .. i am blessed this reached you in all the ways it should .. than.. read more
Eilis

3 Years Ago

I look forward to reading your take on the idea, perhaps. You’re very welcome, E.



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hi einstein, i'm no romantic but i loved this poem & actually 'got it'!
nice poetic imagery here, congratulations. 👏
cheerio carola
ps. i do look at your poetry but as I stated in my profile if I don't get it, then I don't comment.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

yes ... we know each other a bit, Carola .. and i know the more abstract of my poems do not speak to.. read more
such a wonderful write, i loved that picture that you used.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

i appreciate that Kay-T ... so happy you enjoyed reading .. and the pic! yes .. i love it too .. was.. read more
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I believe your final line sums the whole poem up perfectly here.....we can have all the material wants that our heart desires but it never compares to having that one special person beside us to share all of those desires with. This is quite a romantic poem, very visual and sensual and that accompanying picture just adds to the intrigue and sense of romanticism. Sometimes its the simple things that are all we need. Fine expression here, dear E! Much enjoyed! :))

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thank you Jamila! i'm so happy you reviewed this one ... and gratified you found something worthwhil.. read more
This appears like one of those never ending human conditions
Never satisfied with what we have and always wanting more

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

g'day to ya Dave! is this our first meeting? ... i will have to stop by and say hi as well ... yes ... read more
I want never gets...desires and dreamz ... what is wanted is not always needed ...but the beauty of the words you write here is something all should have...I wish upon these words as well...🌹

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

yes sometimes .. always wanting ;} and truly not always needed ... certainly a motivation though .. .. read more
Oh la la! of longing want and desire!... " impaling" is ... Hmmm stopping the flow for me. I might have chosen a different word... BUT loving the feel of his one. :-)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

:) ... i see your point .. it is a bit of a contrasting "image" ... i am taking your thoughts to hea.. read more
Susan 🌺

2 Years Ago

Held captive in thought....
captivating thoughts
penetrating thoughts
Tantaliz.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

oh...what good is it to be here if we can not challenge one another .. respect in our differing is m.. read more
This is such a sweet poem, how I have smiled reading it all the way to the end, it has some warmness. I loved it,let me re-read it

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

what more of a blessed review could one ask for .. that you enjoyed the experience and want to read .. read more
Cassie

3 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend
This is a lovely piece with sweeping emotions and nice imagery. I love the image you chose for this


Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

me to Lyn! that suspended whale screams at me ;) thanks for taking time and finding my little love p.. read more
A passionate plea. Great imagery and use of metaphor

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

;) Thanks Mom!
E.
goodness, this is exquisite, I can actually feel the tug in this desire filled decadent long tall drink, where are there any pieces in this puzzle? I usually have to think on it for a bit, I did have to look up tensile tenuto , love how you used that , and the "chocolat" recipe for desire and it delivers a straight forward
tense long note of wanting, just beautiful, love the photo

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

you scooped up all i was trying to serve, Corset ... i could not feel any more gratified as a result.. read more

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