POWERFUL PHRASE

I just wanna befriends is a powerful phrase

left me confused and in a daze

All i wanted to do was use a knife

so that i could end my useless life

Why i asked for you to be with me

the whole time you never was happy

Sorry i wasted so much of your time

To this day i wish you were mine

Reviews

[Apathy To Empathy]

TT^TT
T'is sad, but i can relate...I think everytime I feel this way, i'll think of your poem as a reminder that I am not alone.

[qaralynn]

aawh this is really sad..great write

[Calypso]

This is so powerful and full of emotions. Good job.

[~lost and in my fantisi..]

very good! short but powerful! u are talented! =]

[livspen]

I believe it's "you never were happy."
Decent grammar is the very least one expects.....

[r]

i often feel this way.... it is a hard feeling to deal with... nice poem though

[Sharkapillar]

Oh dear. I understand this, too well.
The rhyme seemed almost effortless. My Obsessive Compulsive Disorder bade me tell you that your capitalization may need a bit of work. The flow of this was quite graceful, and the emotion behind it all definitely empowered it, to a crushingly painful point. I sympathize, I empathize, and I hope things turn out better for you. :) ♥
~Blessed Be~

[Gheeneil]

Indeed a powerful phrase for someone who means it. It was just so sad how this piece ended. Keep writing.

[Joy Lynn B.]

Wow this is very powerful! It's really good too! =)

[<3 Simply Rebekah <3]

wow, for sure a powerful piece man!
i likey!