Mourn

 

 

 

The heart scattered with wings that never flew

And dreams laid waste and happiness too few

The wind lashes and calls in a wash of broken rain

All you grasp in finger loads are hung hours of pain

 

If I could see the moment when it all went wrong

If I could fix and tune the melody and the song

 If the flowering rose stood whole in storms eye

Dreams could weather typhoons and knots untie

 

The world be like the fountains endless spring

Your heart and mine delicately on the wing

And every bare branch burnt and hung out to dry

Would spurt in growth flower and forever fly

 

So when autumn rusts in all its glory appear

You would be at one with courage conquering fear

Yet now it is the darkness creeps and shadows the door

My heart lay bare wasted and broken to the core

 

Now that the angels of mercy from the heart is gone

Here on this bloody cross here lies a life to mourn

 

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

Your writing is lovely ,your lines carry so much emotion

[MOON]

Thanks Hon, take care

[Ruth]

What a moving piece of heart....this made me tearful Moon and rightly so...it was felt...simply that...felt x

[MOON]

Thanks Poppy appreciate the review. Take care.

[Pryde Foltz]

Yeah… you know what your doing. Great rhyme and alliteration. This is one following developed and clear piece.

[MOON]

Thanks , much appreciated. Take care!

[An owl on the moon]

What an overwhelming sorrow... the loss of a loved one... the loss of what was... and what could have been. The mourning is a saddened song that plays over and over in the heart...

[MOON]

Thank you Craig, always love reading your insight.take care.

[MOON]

Your pain and sadness is well conveyed in this write dear Moon... very seasonal, and beautifully written.

You always have a great way with words, and verse. Plus, I hope all is well take care...

- Elisa

[MOON]

Thanks Elisa , hope you well too. All the best.

[Relic]

Such a sad write Moon. It always feels so bad when we know we might have made a difference. Great lines in this.

[MOON]

Thank you kindly , take care!

[Pax]

The wind lashes and calls in a wash of broken rain
All you grasp in finger loads are hung hours of pain

I might take this on a literal view. I can’t help it and see my countrymen who are suffering from the aftermath of the storm surges. Striking our country with surging waves of wind and water flatting the lands and washing away, killing thousands of people. It’s true that nature’s climate changes are very destructive.

Most of the time we can’t predict the extent of what’s coming. We can never undo what is already passed. The aftermath to any troubled times, the first step to survival is the hardest to overcome, but as we start to accept and relieve ourselves from all the burdens of the past, the next new beginning is not really far ahead.

A every expressive piece dear Moon.

[MOON]

Thanks Pax, hope all your friends and family safe , yes there is much too mourn in your country,and to build. Go well. Thanks for your time.

[Caradoc]

Pretty in its sadness...

Were it that we never had to die. But then...what would life become?

-Caradoc

[MOON]

Thank you so much , sometimes we dead long before we die ...appreciate your review, take care.

[Caradoc]

You are welcome. You take care as well.

[Lydia Shutter]

Stripped of joy, the heart withers in pain. In hindsight we often see the reasons things went wrong, but unfortunately it is a case of too much, too little, too late. Heartfelt emotions in this well written poem, Moon. Your rhyming is flawless. Lydi**

[MOON]

Thanks Lydia, you hit the nail on the head. Take care

[Will Neill]

Moon, great poem,lovely verse,well written. A natural poet. Loved it.
Will

[MOON]

Many thanks most appreciated , take care!