Then softly she cries

Dreams and memories never die, they just move deeper into the recess of ones mind..

 

Music playing softly in the background
She dances, her thoughts blank
Transported back to a time when she was young
Memories that had faded to the cobwebs of thoughts
Now come out, light dusty pictures from her youth.

She moves slowly back and forth
Eyes closed, transported back in time
Fine wine, savor the taste, on her forgotten senses
She starts feeling her walls fall, like small picket fences.

Room dark, lights down low
She moves slowly, Finally letting herself go
All defenses down, she faces her past
Her heart begins to feel, such as never before

Flooding her path..Her moment of sanity
Now stood an open door, defenses
Let out to dry, only her memories now
A thing from the past, slipping on by.

To the never-lands of her past only in dreams
Like a stone she was, emotions pushed back
Now forging forth, pushing at the seems
Of her mind, heart, her very existences.

Clawing, she fights..Her thoughts
Memories, heart, all she holds dear
Too late, a whisper, too late, nothing to do
Nothing to fight, who's now the fool.


Music playing softly in the background
And she dances slowly.. Back and forth
Not a memory does she have, not even a thought

Then softly she cries...
For she knew she was lost.

 

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Very evocative, moving, and well executed. The image of the dancer sets the scene well. We all love to dance. But here the dance feels like and emotional dance. (Like the way you close off the poem with the same image, as if the dance continues.) Like the feeling of the walls falling and, especially, the notion of pushing at the mind's seams. The process of revisiting, or even feeling these emotions on a level never felt before could be very positive, or very distressing depending on what the underlying moods were. The poem gives the feel of a sort of self-hypnosis, or analysis. The crying could be because you are so very moved by life. An intense moment all round, beautifully captured.

[EmpressPoetess]

This is very good writing to depict sadness. Your imagery is very vivid and your words, eloquent. Nice!

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This is spellbinding to say I loved every word would be overkill however every strophe has deeper meaning than first realized and they build on each other to s resounding crechendo! well done my dove well done

[SilentDreamer]

Very well done. Flows wonderfully and tells a story. Interesting and I mean what I say when I say this is a creative poem. Lovely. Great job and I do hope you keep writing. :D

[Bright Eyes]

I love this! I especially like the last two lines: "Then softly she cries...
For she knew she was lost." This is very well-written and it expresses not only an image but a lot of emotion.