ToRmEnTeD sOuL

A ghostly collaboration by Magdelena and Sean M. Adams

A photograph captures his tormented soul

Lingering spirit trapped beneath heaven and a shallow hole

Never understood his life came to an end

Feeling a strange presence caught in the wind

The mirror will reflect a foggy glimpse of a shadowy sight

Looking into the face of darkness causes chill bumps of fright

Death is a curse haunting the holy air

Brings a tingling forceful sensation through the tips of your hair

He roams throughout the vastness of empty space
The crippled look of sadness steadily on his face
His thoughts empty, just like his soul
This spirit unholy, caught, for nowhere else to go
Searching for a means, a way to see within'
Yet forging ahead, his ungodly sin
'Move away', it whispers, gently in the night
Grasping at emptiness, it quickly loses sight
Fog follows beneath, above and behind
For this tormented soul, a fragment is all he shall ever find
Feeling a strange presence caught in the wind

Never understood his life came to an end

Lingering spirit trapped beneath heaven and a shallow hole

A photograph captures his tormented soul

 

Author's Note

My first collaboration with Sean, whom I consider one heck of a writer. I thank him for letting me join pens with his great talent.
Hope you all enjoy.. xx

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This is an outstanding in the words used discriptive as can be of the placeLimbo? yet to me an egmatic piece A lost soul I can understand but is is suffering or just experincing some vague form of disgust at the life left behind?
I just do not understand.

[Ladysue]

This flows brightly but wow a dark tale you both have spun..you have a lot of good imagery in this piece...nicely done...

[Karina Longo]

I don't know if it's me trying to get things out of nowhere, but to me you are a writer that cares a lot about detail, and to me this is wonderful. First, the way the title is written - it's a soft, simple association with the theme of writing; the messy, unfinished, dark and twisted mystery of what leads one to finish with their lives.
Sorry to go into every little detail, but I also like that you wrote it with dark bold letters, it gives more intensity to the obscurity of your haunting imagery.
Tragic, full of impact, touches your heart with this unquiet sorrow - my congratulations to you and Sean, it is a strong, outstanding piece. :)

[Tate Morgan]

very interesting and a bit different for you

[Fran Marie]

A death chilling collaboration piece indeed ....Spooky and ghostly haunting to the bone....am lovin' it!! Kudos to you both on a job well donE!!

[Tina Kline]

I enjoyed this very much indeed! This is very tragic and chilling at the same time. Extremely spooky. I feel for that poor ghost who's picture was taken. Fantastic collaboration with Sean.

[KAREN]

Lost souls, And the image to match, the music was an excellent add on!
Great job you two!!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Outstanding collabration! Both of you did an excellent job!!!

[Forest Green]

Very nicely rhymed; with a depth of meaning to match the tormented soul...with an image to match.

Very good work...

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Picture perfectly captured in words. Sean is a fine writer as are you .. so what do we expect other than a chilling write from two skilled pens.

Chloe