She Is Everything

She is everything I have ever wanted and so much more. I hate when we dont talk because it makes me miss you.

I dont know what it is
But every time I talk to her
All I feel is...
Love

I feel like I have my whole future planned out
I can just picture as together
...Forever

When we say goodbye for the night
I begin to miss her
And wonder when we will speak again

I try to distract myself
But no matter how hard I try
She is always on my mind

By the end of the day
It feels like my hearts been torn apart

And just when I begin to lose hope
There she appears
And I feel a sense of relief that we are talking again

Everything I had once felt vanishes into thin air
I feel happy and alive
And that piece of me that was missing
Were replaced by her

I dont know what it is
But all I know is that I love her
And maybe someday soon
....

We'll end up together
Forever

Author's Note

I wrote this from my Mr. Guy! He told me how he felt about me and everything happening to us. I wrote this to help him out cause he wanted to write me a poem, but didnt know how so I helped him out. What do you think!?

Reviews

[The Wave]

Not bad!

It does get a little messy and I see some wordy lines in the middle, but the feelings and emotion comes across crisp and clear. I do think you could have described it with more imagery so I would Really Feel Your Words though.

Overall, good writing. Very relatable.
Good job

[Havatara]

It was good. I thought that the boxing part was sort of random, and you didn't really need the entire line "Boxing is something I love to do." Other than that I loved it. Great job.

[Soul Magic✯]

beautifully written. you are very talented with words... wonderful sentiments shared here. i enjoyed reading this piece

This is amazing, told from the boy's perspective...I really love it. It's so beautiful :)

[zack]

this is real good nice job

[Tina Kline]

Tender and romantic. I think this is great, nice job!