VERSE-LESS

upon raging still waters
nothing stirs within
this corporeal blackness

light eludes the vessel
silenced and numb
as the roar of fickle tides
obscures the fragments
of a shattered puzzle
splayed across the sea

amorphous reflections
bring dissolution to
a fading visage
into the depths
of an unversed abyss

Reviews

[Mark]

"raging still waters" brings to my mind a deep running emotion, far beneath the surface where no one can see.

"Obscures the fragments of a shattered puzzle splayed across the sea" beautiful line.

An ocean can contain a lot of emotion, rage, but it gives us warning.

The darkness of the poem is not so much disturbing as alluring. Good write.

[Wondering Mind]

This is the second exquisite piece I've read today on "what I understood from the title" to be writer's block. But, it could also be about any state of numb-ness.
Excellent

[Ed Hart]

when you get the mirrors facing each other just right, it's not so hard to do thin

[Kenneth The Poet]

Love this.

[fireblossom]

nice use of words sparking fun like looking through a window and seeing a mad scientist stirring words in a beaker

[Lion of Judah]

Lonely sad vivid and articulate mmmm I like it

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I loved this piece. I love the flow and descriptive language to this piece. I love the darkness within this piece as well. Thanks for sharing.

[Friks]

Fantastic! I enjoy how you convey the dark and undefined numbness.

[Lion of Judah]

Mmmmmm bath in still waters high as a canyon

[Igor G. Balatsky]

A kind of zen contemplation. So deep and thoughtful. I enjoy that.