I Am A Woman With Needs

A satirical piece, the art of self sabotage.

A day like this

(oh who am I to fool

it's every day that's a day like this

when) I want a man's love,

(but more)

 

I want all his love,

(and I've got to be his only love)

and I wonder how I ask for too much

when all I want is to be the first

(even when I am not)

 

(Not only the first,

I have to be the best)

woman he has ever loved

and every day he must remind me

(even when he stops).

Reviews

[Lalli]

and any man would be fortunate to be the recipient of such love. I like the change in voice throughout the piece. Except I disagree with one thing. Because if a man is to love as described in this poem, my only question is... would it EVER really stop? even after death? I believe his love would still exist within your heart so.... Can it really stop? If he's reached capacity to give you ALL his love. :)

[tekphobik]

And oh how I am reminded of so many *wonderful* relationships I've had with insane creatures. Thanks. Thanks for ruining my day.

[highthought]

Even when he stops. that will be called love

[See ya]

I am that man.
My love never ends---- it will never stop. She had what you long for in this poem---but she had to let me go for reasons unknown.
Find an evolved man with Venus in Scorpio and you will be loved forever.

That poem is my soul mate.

I like the segmented format and how you put it together. This is a good poem

[rash]

beautiful work. it has curves.

[Alessander]

I like the format - it's like the emotional optimistic side is on the left, and the logical pessimistic side is on the right. The very last line I think saves this piece from a fairy-tale wish to a more mature reconciliation. I would like a bit more figurative language, as another reviewer pointed out, it's pretty straight-forward, but it's still good nevertheless.

[Dream Weaver]

Experience tells me that every woman is in search of this.
and every man is in fear of this.. For me personally it should
be a 50/50 split..I really enjoy this...nicely done...

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

This is maybe one of the best love poems I read lately , nothing more should be said , its true, we need to feel that feeling , that we are the best love, that we are the first, we need to feel special , even if we are not ,... Yossi

[fireblossom]

Split in two for to make two.

Another tasty poem. I like reading your stuff RT.