Euphoria

Her body aches for a
touch she has not felt.

She yearns for something...
anything he would do with his hands.

Allow your lips to explore her body,
let your eyes rape her soul.

Softly caress her neck,
And run your fingers down her back.

Let her feel you inside her,
let her reach euphoria with you.

Bring pain in its purest state,
with a push that will be once.

Reviews

[The Girl That Let You G..]

As D.Welslet A. has pointed out, it is sort of conflicting in places, and romantic in others. It was almost as whilst writing some of the lines where the words are used much stronger, the writer was craving, practically begging for his touch. I like it, its very good.

[David Wesley]

Couple things stood out for me.

"anything he would do with his hands." - I like this, leaves it to the reader's imagination.

"let your eyes rape her soul. " - Seems a bit heavy, "rape" is a very strong word to use here and I feel it contrasts with the next line, "Softly caress her neck, ".

"let her reach euphoria with you." - Like this too, it's romantic.

But i'm unsure how I stand with your last stanza, I can go with her being a virgin (and would seem to agree with the pain, and "once") --- but again "pain" seems to connect with the strong idea of rape, so for me it breaks the rhythm of a smooth, euphoria.

BUT -- that connects with your first stanza, so a touch not felt could be please OR pain. Hmm. Food for thought. =) I like it.