51

I dropped the Conscience while I was fleeing

The Celestial Temple of Cogitation.

Mind has done enough sightseeing

Of the silent Anarchy’s gestation…

Its coordinates has many doorways

And yet folks stay clear out of the Mud

But oh, the precious Humanity has always

Had its tree roots soaked in blood.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[ruth]

humanity has succumbed to violent acts. the consciousness is no longer in control of the human ways. the savage appears

[Ana B.]

Thank you Ruth.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

i love this piece and thanks for sharing.

[Ana B.]

Thank you Roxane :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes the only way to survive in this world is to lose concsience.....but some can't and get buried under the roots....but poets have such consciences that they seem unable to ignore the blood---and we write about it in a steady flow.Our veins leak.

j.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for stopping by Jacob.

[Norman 223]

In following our paths of life, we sometimes lose our "conscience" in order to achieve. We cannot always be pacifist, when faced with unrelenting antagonism.
A powerful poem that faces reality, without losing one's ideals.

[Ana B.]

Thank you for the insightful words Norman :)

[barleygirl]

I honestly don't follow everything in your poem, but after I read the reviews, I started to piece more of it together. The last 2 lines are crystal clear, tho, & stated powerfully! Brings to mind the many ways all things seem to point to pain or war or separation these days. Great image to go with these two awesome lines especially. I hate that violence has to be the solution to everything it seems. Thought-provoking & timely message!

[Ana B.]

You can interpret my words in any way, there is no right or wrong :) Thank you for the beautiful words Margie :)

[barleygirl]

I knew I could be straightforward with you (((HUGS)))

[Ana B.]

Of course :)

[Ashwin Shanker]

The visual is too stunning. The poem successfully competes to beat it in its own visual experience

[Ana B.]

Thank you Ashwin :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like how the last two lines create a strong impact of what you conveyed. And the pic too. Penetrating write, Ana.

P.S why 51? I don't get the reference to it ... :|

[Ana B.]

Thank you Yumna. Oh, my 51 reference has no deep meaning, it's just the number of words this poem is made of :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ooh interesting! And I just counted ;)
You're welcome 😊

[Ana B.]

ha ha i didn't, my word document told me :D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p I'm lazy enough that I don't use word document, I just save my stuff in my emails lol

[Ana B.]

I'm actually writing them down, i have a thick notepad, i find writing by hand a very soothing activity :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is if one writes like you. :) I cringe when reading what I what I wrote whenever I decide to write them down lol

[Ana B.]

Ah you're way to generous with me my friend, but not as nearly generous with yourself, it's a rare thing :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I guess it's never easy to be generous on yourself...

[Ana B.]

indeed, i remember a friend once told me quite blunt: ''own your s**t'' haha, but i guess it's not as easy as it looks

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah yeah true that lol

[Carol Cashes]

"But oh the precious Humanity has always
Had its tree roots soaked in blood."

Since Cain and Abel.

The pic with this piece is perfect and reinforces the "tone".

[Ana B.]

Thank you Carol :)

[Ty]

Really enjoyed "...It's coordinates has many doorways." Brilliant.

[Ana B.]

Thank you Ty :)

[Einstein Noodle]

the enigma of your minds journey comes to a sharp focus in your closing ... the tree of life has deep roots in Celtic lore (i have one tattooed on me belly) ;) so i listened to the music all the way through first ..i was expecting some kind of tree to arise from it all so was a little disappointed ;))
i think the pic of the pines is fantastic (would be a great tat) the walk through the mind in the first five lines covers a lot of ground well done ..being an introvert i enjoy introspection and your closing really hit my own conscience ... and saddens me ...so your poem is, for me, emotive as well ..a tragic age long conflict of spirit and body well said
E.

[Ana B.]

I think you would enjoy the movie '' The fountain'' quite a bit. Thank you for your words Einstein :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i will check that out ..thanks!