The life I never wanted !!

If you don't mind my harsh judgments and opinions: I think punctuation and grammar is important. You may talk through text with !! And .... But in a novel it looks really bad. It's distracting and hard to read. Also, you'd be surprised at how well you can Develop your story if you try to describe it in one sentence. Try looking up the snow flake method on writing a novel. Also you might not wanna start out with a description of everyone you know. It's soemthing I used to do at a very young age. Point bank: it's boring. Useless facts about characters makes me want to stop reading. What you can do instead is talk about a time relevant to the story that introduces all the characters from a past life. Lastly, detail makes your story. If you add more about your surroundings in a format where it doesn't seem like an illiterate woman is telling me what happened to her you'd be better off. Too much detail and too little is a problem. Try putting only what's necessary to create imagery. It's great you have all this backstory on everyone, but you need to focus on relevancy to develop the scene.

Read my short story (and I mean very short) to see if my review is worth it (:

Posted 7 Years Ago