Cycle

Time rolls as yarn on to spindle
Pleating weeks, months, and many a season
With slew of substance upon spool,
Weaves the loom of life a florid yarn.

As past piles up and future pares,
Next stop, only the heaven's door.
Paved a prized path for re-entries,
for Karma, the valid auditor!

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

had to read several times ..this travels from the everyday to deeply spiritual and philosophical in so few lines .. i like the assonance, the whole knitting thing .. really like the transposition in V1 L4 ..it has a strong rhythm to it ... i could go on as for me every line and word gives me pause to think and let it soak in .. words like pleating, florid, pares, and wonderful closing "...valid auditor" ...top notch says i!
E.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you very much for that heart warming review, dear E. you made my day. Always appreciate your visits. Thanks again.

[Jimmy Yetts]

An Eastern spiritual perspective.
Well stated.

[Coyote Poetry]

Karma does demand payment. Live a bad life. You will pay in three-fold.
"for Karma, the valid auditor!"
I did like the ending above. Thank you Mrudula for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you dear John, for the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Paul Bell]

Time flies, the clock keeps ticking.
It's the ultimate race.
The only one you can never win.

[Mrudula Rani]

That's the truth!
Thank you for your wonderful thoughts.

[Chris Shaw]

I love the way you have approached time passing. This is an interesting and imaginative way to get your message across M. Produces great imagery too.

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you, C. That's a very lovely review .

[Gee]

And whilst you sit amongst the Angels I'll be toiling away with the devil himself, shovelling coal onto fires that will sear the souls of the very bad. However, I'm okay with that, will save me from buying a gym membership to keep fit and I also hate the cold.
I agree whole heartedly with Neville Mrudula, you wield a very fine pen.
Hope Sunday finds you all in rude health :)))

[Mrudula Rani]

Just for the pleasure of the company of your splendorous personality, I will follow you wherever you go Gee.
Thank you . Have a great week dear. Uma abraço

[andrew mitchell]

Nice work Mrudula. I agree with Neville with each write you can see improvements. Very nicely said.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you dear Andrew, for your very kind words.

[barleygirl]

You dream up some of the most amazing & startling analogies! This one really tickles my fancy, thinking about life & time as a spindle with thread winding on (great visual) . . . I found myself thinking about how the thread color & texture may change, causing various pile-ups and parings (love first line of 2nd stanza). The last two lines are thought-provoking . . . I don't often ponder how the end of life plays out . . . what happens when breath ends? I love this: "valid auditor" . . . in other words, I won't have any bozos judging my journey! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[Mrudula Rani]

Loved your review. Margie Querida, you have beautiful sense of humor, " I won't have any bozos judging my journey!' That is brilliant! Thank you .

[Neville]

Your poetry just keeps getting better and better Mrudula & these, your most recent words not only shout truth, they are without doubt your finest yet. Neville

[Mrudula Rani]

Hi Neville dear. Thank you for your kindness. I am getting better at writing because of the wonderful influence of gifted writers like you my friend. Hope your are keeping well, it seems a like long time since we talked. Uma abraço meu querido.

[Neville]

You are up there with the best my friend & yes, it does seem a long time... x