Skin Deep

(original upload found here: http://truml.com/profile/poetry-detail/103559 )

Not a single flaw in your olive skin; 
Actions suggest you want everything; 
Locks flow freely, like golden waterfalls; 
Others gawp and stare, tripping over their feet; 
With glassy eyes, show they are keen to meet; 
This creature, which holds such beauty; 

That shimmering white smile wont fool me; 
The flawed personality, that i see; 
A deformed monster of utter nightmares; 
Hidden behind advertisements and dolls; 
Manipulating with ILY's and LOL's; 
And Perspectives shallower than outer skin;

Author's Note

not recently written was written at about the 21/02/2012

Reviews

[Melati]

Wow this is so stunning. The second stanza is very sad "That shimmering white smile wont fool me; The flawed personality, that i see; A deformed monster of utter nightmares; Hidden behind advertiement and dolls; Manipulating with ILY's and LOL'S; And Perspectives shallower than outer skin;

On the the first stanza all is about how beauty she or he is and the second stanza it speaks the ugliness of she or he. Well done!

[Marie]

Beauty has such power--until the deeper truth is unveiled. You've said it very well.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Some flaws are clearly seen .. by perceptive eyes .. Sometimes the heart gets in the way .. but sooner or later .. we see the real person ..

good write .. Jasmine

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed it reads of the stunning elegance of time as always, well done, good read.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Wouldn't it be nice if monsters looked like we always portray them, but unfortunately, they look normal or even beautiful. Nice writing, Jock!

[SuicidePact.]

Fantastic

[Jock Engelman]

thank you very much guys, i am very happy with this poem too

[Sleeping Maiden]

Amazing poem! I highly enjoyed this! Quite unique. I love the 2nd stanza!
Great write! =)

[AK]

Beautiful poem! Stunning quality. Keep writing!

[closed..acct]

Cute write really, love the last three lines the best.
Amazing write. Enjoyed