My Nymphetamine Girl

This is based off a song by Craddle of Filth.

Why do you seem so lonely,
My nymphetamine girl?
I want to cast my presence upon you,
And cure your lonely.
You are so wild like fire.
But I can’t help but kiss the flame,
And burn thy lips upon such a pleasure.

Oh my sweet nymphetamine girl.
How I do love thee.
Raining your soft tears of passion,
As I fulfill your ever growing need.
Let thy finger tips brush your rose petal skin.
And thy heart beat strong,
As I caress your soul.

How may I serve you,
My lovely nymphetamine girl?
Your addiction grows alongside mine.
But your drug is purely tangible,
Where mine is surreal.
I'd do anything to please you.
Even though you need just one thing.

My poor nymphetamine girl.
Such a slave to your hungry desires.
I may love thee but pity is true.
Without such essence,
You're a fire with no fuel.
Your petals wither away,
Until my body is yours again the next day.

My sweet, lovely, poor nymphetamine girl.

 

Author's Note

I was sooooooo happy when I rememebered that I had saved this poem on my myspace. whoo. I thought it was gone forever.

Reviews

[Kiri J]

mmm this is good. nympthetamine is such a good word.

(just a query though... "As I cores your soul." is that word supposed to be caress?

My lovely nymphetamine girl?

Your addiction grows alongside mine.

But your drug is purely tangible,

Where mine is surreal.

i love that.

great write.

K

[Michael Lopez]

its like my only favorite song by cradle of filth
Nice write

[T.B. Odin]

Other than some grammar, I can find no flaws. There is just the right amount of subtle softness as there is tenderness described. The words are not overpowering the subject and the flow is smooth as her " rose petal skin ". It is strange that you think you wrote this from the eyes of a man.
After I read this I clearly got the impression that this was written by a woman, dreaming of how she wanted a man to see her....a twist maybe, maybe not, however it is an inspiration and a heart drumming poem. I enjoyed it very much and am glad you request my opinion. Keep up the good work.

[Azizi- - !!]

Mm. My favorite song too. Ahh. This is a good write, good to see someone write in that form.
:]
Thanks for the submission.

[Legion]

I know the feeling. 24/7. Well done.

[Yaooooooo]

I figure what the word you were using ment, but what i dont understand is why you use such character. Is interesting, i guess we all want to be something we are not. Than again we all have the right to dream,
Interesting!
One!

[Duane Klinger]

I'm not quite sure what made me enjoy this poem so well. . .It could have been the fact that it was teeming with sensuality or maybe because the language you used was beautiful. All I know is that there aren't that many poets who would go where you did and do it so greatly. Good one.
MKLINE

[John Stussy]

Hmmm, great poem, very alluring in sensuality heh. Good work, as always Niki.

[autumnsky]

Hey, I read this and is a totally awesome write. I love the made up word and how you applied it thru out the write. In alot of ways I can relate to that girl. Lonely and only feeling real when in the sexual mode, and when being allowed to be free in the sexual mode. Sort of sad in it's own way. Great write.

[James Mayfield]

I completely understood nyphetamine. I don't know the exact reason for your court date but this points to an unhealthy sexual attraction that has become a drug. I applaud your metaphor and use of imagery and hope that the inspiration of this has not caused you too much pain. Thank you so much for sharing, I thouroughly enjoyed this piece.