Gone

Gone

A Poem by NaCl

Gome are the days

Of the careless and the free

Gone are the days

Of the you and me

Given way to depressing

Opressing creatures

We used to be so vivid

Bright as the sun

Then came the later years

It was not long before we were done

I used to dream a twisted dream

That followed every fairty tale

To the T

I dreamed a dream

Of you and me

© 2011 NaCl


Author's Note

NaCl
Hope you like it, grammer/spelling corrections are encouraged so I can fix them and make it easier to read

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Very nice, I like the repetitiveness in the first few lines and the syntax.
"I used to dream a twisted dream
That followed every fairty tale
To the T"
Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Loved it! Just change the 'm' in gone to an 'n'. It's on the first line.

Please mark this constructive!

Posted 12 Years Ago


that's real cute :) but sad at the same time...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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