Distant Lights

Admiring the nature and the distant light makes me miss you more

DISTANT LIGHTS

The lights surrounds me, 

They twinkle like tiny stars.

Darkness finds a way, 

Amidst the brightest paths.

Picturesque the night is,

Into gloominess it falls.

They are glitter to my eyes, 

That gleams like distant stars.

The light dims and shines,

Airbrushed the tiny particles are.

Sparkles they are of a dark night,

Far, yet near than the stars.

There is something about the distant lights, 

That captures my attention. 

They make me miss the person I love, 

Distance- I fear, is the cause of our separation.

Admiring the nature and the distant lights

Makes me miss you more. 

I wish I could end the distance

So that we could watch the radiance along. 

I want you too along the scene, 

So that you complete my view.

Stand under the cloudy sky

And watch the distant stars with me.

Make the lights shine bright with your presence 

Fill my heart with your love to the core.

Light up the sky with me, come along

Let's not worry about the distance anymore. 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I like the way you juxtapose darkness with the pinpoints of faraway lights, since you need darkness to appreciate the spread of lights (as in your picture). I like the way you poem seems to meander along at a slow pace, not really expressing urgency, but it seems your message slowly gets around to comparing the light show with the idea of missing another person. Overall you paint a fulsome sequence of ideas. In the stanza before the last stanza, you write: "stand under cloudy sky & watch stars" -- this does not sound authentic to me, since nobody watches the stars under a cloudy sky! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Najam Us Saher]

By that line I meant the faraway lights as stars not the actual stars. I really appreciate this review. Thank you very much, I am happy that you liked this. ☺

[raj24]

Distance certainly play its part, it works both ways, it makes the bond strong as well as keep you away. Writing for the one we love is always a beautiful experience and sharing you memories of how we felt when we missed you is an amazing feel. I hope your love will go stronger and keep writing, Its beautiful work.

Raj

[Najam Us Saher]

I wholeheartedly agree with your words. Thank you so much.

[raj24]

:) welcome

[¿]

I've heard, distance enhances and thickens love...but never anybody said to me...does it happens from both sides! Maybe sometimes both the souls miss each other while they find a distance between them....and sometimes just one soul suffers and the another enjoys the life to the fullest....
It's a beautiful poetic read of this morning...thanks for sharing Najam :)

[Abraham George]

When you love someone deep, if s/he stays in distance and there is no contact between both for a long time. It will result in separation.

[¿]

Maybe! I've never been through such...and reading this feels like....it hurts...

[Abraham George]

I know how it feel because i know someone gone through such situation. Any yes it really hurts.

[¿]

Time may heal or fail...but may the hurt heart smile, real one, ameen :)

[Abraham George]

Time should heal...I wish. Because the one I know is so close to me. I don't like tears in those eyes.
Inshaallah.

[¿]

Nor do I :(....Inshallah time will heal...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much Tahsin. In this love both souls suffer because of distance.

[¿]

You're always welcome Najam! :)
Now!!!!! ((Smile))

[wordman]

almost like a picture of the night sky

[Najam Us Saher]

I am happy that you could picture my words. Thank you so much.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful and worthwhile words. I like the tone of the words leading to a very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Najam Us Saher]

I thank you so much for reading.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Christy the Poetic Hear..]

Very beautiful, smooth and poetic!!!!
Wonderful work friend!!!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for such a compliment.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Beautiful
Just beautiful
Loved it really!!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much :)