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Apricity

Apricity

A Poem by Moonie
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~hot cocoa and melting marshmallows~

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Maybe I can bring myself 
to say goodbye
to what the winter buried
and what the spring brought forth. 
The rose-gold blush of sunrises
and skies sugared with
will o' wisp clouds,
the bicycle bells
and meadow flowers,
apricity kissing my freckles
in the early morning hours
when the world smells of
hot cocoa and melting marshmallows
and the newfound warmth 
weeps in remembrance of
January's snow showers.

© 2023 Moonie


Author's Note

Moonie
Farewell to winter!
Apricity= the warmth of the sun in winter
I wanted to capture the essence of the time of the year when winter is about to end and spring is just starting off, when we still have the occasional snowfall but the flowers have begun to bloom again...
Suggestions for improvement are welcome!

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Wow! I learned a new word! I'd never heard that one before! I had to look it up. Well, that alone is cause for praise from me. I so enjoy learning new things and especially new words! But the poem itself was beautiful as well and I like the illustration/photo you chose to go with it too. Ah, I see if I had read the "author's note" I could have saved myself a Google search. (laughing) but it's okay, I don't read the reviews of others either because I like to leave my own impressions in the comment. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

1 Year Ago

Haha i love learning new words too, especially ones that are as poetic as this one. I learned this f.. read more
Moonie

1 Year Ago

thank you *



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I want sugared skies!! what a wonderful way to see it. I read this as it is 115 degrees outside and found myself wanting. Deliciously written.

Posted 10 Months Ago


whether sitting beside the fire or under the shade of a tree. wow, what a great word and pic. your words float like the flakes of at the beginning or end of a snow along with the winter-spring transition. ends make way for new beginnings and beginnings stoke the flames of memories. you've quite elegantly accomplished your mission ... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


you sure did capture it...not so many would be sorry to see winter leave us...but you gave us pause to change our minds with this intense description.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


A new word and it is a beauty, as is the imagery

skies sugared with
will o’wisp clouds

apricity kissing my freckles

Really enjoyed the warmth in this poem. Winter receding, spring advancing. Thank you Moonie.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for the review! :)) I am glad you liked it!!
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Loved it. Great little write :)
Wow! I learned a new word! I'd never heard that one before! I had to look it up. Well, that alone is cause for praise from me. I so enjoy learning new things and especially new words! But the poem itself was beautiful as well and I like the illustration/photo you chose to go with it too. Ah, I see if I had read the "author's note" I could have saved myself a Google search. (laughing) but it's okay, I don't read the reviews of others either because I like to leave my own impressions in the comment. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

1 Year Ago

Haha i love learning new words too, especially ones that are as poetic as this one. I learned this f.. read more
Moonie

1 Year Ago

thank you *
That was beautiful and refreshing, I could feel the warmth of the sun on a chilly day. Though we don't have snow down here in Texas as a rule, late winter does get cold and feeling spring arrive is a wonderful feeling.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for stopping by. I am glad you liked the poem! :))
No suggestions here. I love the spring, but I love the cold weather of winter too. Seems the older I get the more I enjoy snuggling up in my favorite blanket next to my wife. Springtime brings my little backyard water garden to life.
I love this poem. I can find myself surrounded by the sounds, sights, and smells of spring.
Thanks for sharing this brilliant piece of work.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

1 Year Ago

I personally love fall the most. I am glad you liked the poem. Thank you for the review!
A good write, stirs up feelings of warmth inside the heart. Also, thank you for teaching a beautiful new word. I love it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much! :)))
light and ashes

1 Year Ago

You are welcome, lovely lady.
The irony of reading this poem while a blizzard whooshed about my window 🤣 But hooooly mole! The musicality in this is divine. And a number of juicy and savoury lines that just elicit salivation right down to the sound of the very title: "Apricity" (which apparently is so archaic that modern technology doesn't recognize it as a word lol. I don't have any comments but praise, although if I were to give any suggestions for improvement, I'm debating whether this is even a problem, which is why I have pretty much nothing but praise for this piece - but the line break after "newfound" feels off musically. Poetically the warmth on the new line is the breath of surprise and satisfaction that Spring and Summer are just on the horizon. Putting it with "newfound" to end that line sort of complements the use of the word. Furthermore, the musicality sort of lands on warmth and weeps both in a rather spondaic fashion, but it feels heavier on "weeps" to the point that if it started the line, that fall into the word bears more gravity than it being the second word in the line. That's just my take. There are pros and cons for both cases. (Same goes for adding a "the" to will-o-the-wisp, which is how I know the word to be, and my not seeing the "the" is a bit jarring, however doesn't hurt the poem particularly as a whole). Well freaking done!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

1 Year Ago

I love when reviewers actually give suggestions instead of just praising the poem. I am honestly deb.. read more
Moonie

1 Year Ago

I was just trying to explain my reasoning. I really liked your suggestions and I truly appreciate th.. read more
emipoemi

1 Year Ago

Honestly, I do too (provided there are suggestions to give). It's more the analysis that I look for .. read more

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Added on March 11, 2023
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Tags: winter, poem, poetry, snow, sun, sunrise, apricity, wintry, warm, freckles, cold

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