Parallel Lines

Parallel lines are defined
Two paths that never cross
If you should be on that other path
I would make an angular statement
Intersecting to you..
X marks the spot
Our paths will cross
And we will part in a 90 degree angle
That will leave trails of the memories we shared..
Intersecting..

Reviews

[Lanky]

I like the use of geometric properties being applied to life and human emotion, it makes the poem cute. I do love the last two lines, its a good ending to a cute poem.

[Rachel U.]

Ah. This definitely appeals to the math nerd.
One note: You need to determine whether or not you want full ellipses or periods. Two periods is technically nothing but a typographical error, no matter what anyone might tell you.
Overall, short, cute and sweet. Nothing particularly ingenuitive, ground-breaking or anything, but I still enjoyed reading it.
9.3/10

[alesuriko]

I really enjoyed this poem. Very nice description. I think you're more suited to write poetry about very mundane, simple, plain things and then turn them into art. It's very technical which I love in this sort of poem. Very nicely done and no spelling errors this time. I'm not particular set on the line X marks the spot, very cliche, but it fits the poem well. Nice job.

[Charles]

I like the analogy here and appreciate the imagination that leads to diverging lines (after the intersection) being memories. The single word last line is quite effective in this case... nothing more has to be said, just 'intersecting...'. Good effort.

[JenLyn]

Creative and original but I hate anything that has to do with math lol but overall a good write. Keep it up! :)

[Jibey]

Neat play on the X ... I enjoyed the thought

[R J Askew]

Ach, this I like as you are describing a kiss and a kiss is the most positive of statements. Also there is a poignancy about the poem as it is all over in that moment of crossing. But I've sometimes thought or at least wondered if that is the nature of love: a moment, no more. Life makes us love for a second, all that follows is just ... routine life. But that first clash, when nothing is certain, THAT is love. X ... gone. On to the next set of ==========>x

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I like the story. Your use of direction and parallel caught my attention and held me. I like the ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Khaimera]

MATH! AHHH! :P jk, though I'd never thought geometry had any poesy to it. nice job of drawing that out. there's hope for all subjects, eh?
I like this one, short...but powerful...how we can intersect someone's path, for however long, and then imprint their path with our memories...powerful indeed. :D :D

[Corvus]

Nice! My math teacher would probably marry you if you read that to her XD I love the way you use mathematical terms really captures intelligence in a romance kind of way. Keep up the good work!