To Tell You The Truth

Well why shouldn't I eh?

TO TELL YOU THE TRUTH

It’s getting colder

Colder by the hour

And from a distance

I watch you shiver

Like a single frozen flower

Love is fading

Like a sun tan

Growing weaker by the hour

No more touching

Seldom f*****g

You don’t want me anymore

 

 

Author's Note

Sometimes, unless it is said, the truth hurts even more than if shouted from a mountain

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

truth many times is that painful isn't it Neville!? ;( i think your poem is poignant .. so tragic to watch something we value slip insidiously away ... love, freedom, ... our pay checks :{ ... well said sir .. nice bit of emotive minimalism says i! the scene crystal clear ... Bam! and its shouted from the mountain ... like an arrow to the mark
E.

[Neville]

I so love your very well reasoned responses sir.. and bloomin true... N

[Einstein Noodle]

are you already back fro Bolivia? (was it Bolivia or Bulgaria?? Bulgaria wasn't it) or finding a bit of time here while still on vacation?

[Neville]

am back Gene these last couple of days but with a cracked knee..thought I could jump from rock to rock by the coast like I once could.. I quickly discovered, I could not.... Bulgaria it was... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

oh no my friend ..a cracked knee for your impetuousness :( Norma took my flying cape away after I leaped over the railing of our deck to the asphalt drive below only to blow our me left knee and left rotator cuff ...ouchie .. rehab after surgery was 10 times worse than the painful injuries .. i was playing monster with my 8 yr. old grandson .. he was the monster ;{ ... no more flying for me ... tho i do keep looking for my cape's hidey place ...i suppose i will never learn eh!? heal up quick my friend!!

[Neville]

Bless ya Gene tis awful painful aint it .. havin to hang our flying capes up I mean :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for me big laugh right now! :)))))))))))))))))))

[Neville]

I wish it only hurt when I laughed.... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

then we may not laugh much ...and after all...laughter is as a medicine ..even when hard to swallow :))))))))

[Neville]

Ha ha... so they say.. ouch :))))

[Einstein Noodle]

gulp!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Neville]

................ :)))))) Ow..

[Patricia Wedel]

A single frozen flower... whose petals have flown too high and,
like a kite to the sky... doesn't know why. A string of kisses float down
to land on the earth where flowers grow in sunshine and rain...
where there will be no pain... truly, Pat

[Neville]

How bloomin luverly Pat... bless ya Petal... :)

[Paul Bell]

Like the art of breaking boundaries.
Cold is cold.
But the last f**k is the f**k goodbye.

[Neville]

Yep.. I always find adding a little coke to the Vaseline makes it last just a little bit longer.... N :)

[Paul Bell]

On it. lol

[Neville]

Yes on it.. where else.. lolling back at ya...

[Chris Shaw]

Powerful expression of rejection. To be at the receiving end of this type of behavior sucks. The reader is left to wonder how a relationship deteriorates to this extent. It could be for a myriad of reasons: illness, infidelity, plain boredom, lack of communication, unshared interests. I could go on and on. Your lines always throw open a cavern of possibilities Neville. Bottom line, this was painful, and relatable. You have a poem with a universal theme here as old as the hills. Many will understand the strong emotions generated. There were some lovely lines, which have me very clear imagery. I saw that single frozen flower on a mountainside. This was a very cold write and I was left feeling the chill as much as the author. See it's an old write. Good to get them out for an airing now and again.

Chris

[Neville]

what an amazingly insightful and detailed review you have left here our Chris... very often I find myself penning something that may seem of the moment but in truth is inspired by events of the past, often of the remote past.. tis one of the reasons I think I try to write poetry, rather than an autobiography which would most probably bore the socks off anyone that might trip over it... then of course there is the absolute abstract and fiction that weaves its way through my scribbles... Glad you noticed that this is an oldie.... Neville x

[Chris Shaw]

Because I am relatively new here, (still less than a year) I always do check to see if writers have posted the poem before and if so when. Likewise if mine is an old write I tend to say it is from my archives. It shouldn't really matter one way or the other though. Much of my new work can still go back to stuff which happened a long time ago. It's all poetry and really is timeless. Always good to read your work Neville. Your writing is so utterly distinctive, I could identify your style anywhere :) I am a huge fan.

Chris

[Neville]

Now ya got me going pink to purple and back again... cheers our Chris.. I made a big mistake yesterday when commenting on one of Toms poems.. I thought it was a recent post but it was several years old... Tom by the way is certainly worth checking out.. he is an old mate who rarely puts in an appearance these days... I wish he would... he has a most distinctive style too N :) x

[Chris Shaw]

I'll remember his name. Any recommendation from you is worth checking out. Thank you.

[Neville]

thank you again and my pleasure...

[Onlyme]

Wow, this is harsh, raw and reality it's saddest and worse. When all communication and love has basically died and you are just holding on and no more. Just waiting for the final bit to fade and you be gone. Heartbreaking and tragic. Really felt the emotions in this one. Neville.

[Neville]

Hello Dawn and thank you... I think I may have said it before, but it helps when the imagination kicks in .. Neville x

[Onlyme]

It's true though. :)

[Neville]

tis indeed.. well in my case it is..... :)

[Ken Simm.]

Sad and painful but very true. An end of poem with an edge.

[Neville]

Thank you Ken... yep.. she came without warning and left the same way.... Cheers N

[Cherrie Palmer]

Ya know sometimes the wilting flower just needs a little sunshine.

[Neville]

there is a poem in the making there.. bless ya and true.. N :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

:) remember the sun comes up slowly so you must -neak up on said flower.

[Neville]

now that is just down write sneaky... x

[R.E. Ray]

Your words tear at the heart, but reflecting one might find such a statement refreshing. It's like ripping off the Band-Aid after fretting about the anticipated pain. Just do it, say it, and get over it. Accepting is the first part of healing, or so it seems.

[Neville]

It always helps to have an imagination dunnit... thank you very much indeed R. E Ray for checking in and checking these words out.. tis appreciated, I can tell ya... Neville

[Stella Armour]

truth hurts, but it is better out .... :(

[Neville]

thank you Stella ..... N

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes. Echoes of a poem I recently put up called "a million miles" umm, once again, the cult of you reaching inside my head from half a world away is kind of creepy. Collective consciousness and all that stuff. Cheers.

[Neville]

Cheers indeed, are you into Carl Gustav Jung? I have spent almost my entire working life within the field of mental health.... AGT's my friend KL, N

[Lyn Anderson]

I am one of those people. There is kind of nothing I am NOT into, except I can't figure out the mess of cords and remotes around the TV. My book shelf is the weirdest collection you have ever seen - from Stephen King to Kahlil Gabran, and everything in between. Kit Williams wedged up against Anton Levey. I don't know - then again, my ipod has Feist and Marilyn Manson in the same mix. That's just me.

[Neville]

The cult is on then.... I adore eclecticism. Nev