Painting Flowers

21/6/13 To fall with wings of freedom is to succeed; it is that bird whom flies with stained feathers that meets failure

Painting flowers in the sky
Leaves but one ashen cloud
To fall discreetly;
To needlessly meet me
With a charcoal breeze of summers past,
By antique eyes whom too were paused
By bitter snakes.

Autonomous spines are tickled with the grip of paltry enclosures,
And dance to the door marked 'anywhere',
No care
Nor change in bold complexion to the hopeless
Who presupposed our plunder
Under bloody ice.

I dream of strides that print a blinded road
And blossom,
Into letters in books carved with comely thoughts,
Resting as petals,
On a concrete stairwell
Forever.

Farewell fragility,
The emptiness that crippled me,
Now desolate
As paternal poise and absolute protection.

Bright leaps are in marooned manacles,
Our falls are gracious
When flying with envisioned feathers.

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

i really enjoyed the dark, fantastical wonderland feeling you have going on here! i particularly enjoyed these lines:
"I dream of strides that print a blinded road
And blossom,
Into letters in books carved with comely thoughts,
Resting as petals,
On a concrete stairwell
Forever. "
words resting as petals on a stairwell is such a beautiful image that almost reminds me of the way we document and publish poetry to rest on the concrete stairwell of the earth forever. you've definitely painted flowers with this work and as a sucker for alliteration, i commend you on your work with that, too! lovely.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you so much for you great interpretation of this, we all want to paint colourful words onto the worlds dreary surfaces, and as writers, making its unnoticed small details beautiful is desirable. I too am such a sucker for alliteration!! Thanks again Dana :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

never a problem! i am becoming a fan :)

[Anne Bathory]

Beautiful.
My favorite lines-
Nor change in bold complexion to the hopeless
Who presupposed our plunder
Under bloody ice.

It's a haunting image and fearlessly beautiful in its wording.

[Ohhhwillow]

I'm glad you liked this new friend, I was a bit unsure though you have given me some confidence in myself, thank you for reviewing! :)

[MandaBear]

Wow such a amazing write! Great job Willow!!

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Amanda for your kind review. :)