Gay

I might not be the same, but that's not important. No freedom till we're equal, damn right I support it.

Several years ago, reality slapped me so hard. I wasn't bitter but bewildered.
The feelings were strange but real, This was new, in my spines I felt the chills. No one knew but I believe they had a clue. Whenever I saw someone cute, I felt like playing the flute, expressing my thoughts on the tune. It was weird admiring your own gender but to me, I couldn't ignore such an elegant being. There were days I looked in the mirror, picturing the world accepting me as not a minor. One day I was caught trying a bold ring with the gold looking g-string. Everyone reacted which gave me a huge mood-swing. I was comfortable and happy wearing it, at least my genitals wouldn't face anymore heat. Mum cried, dad felt convincing me will be easy, so he tried but at the end its all about I. They weren't proud so their voices went loud as they made me leave the house. Outside was wider than I thought, time didn't work with the clock because I started seeing my kind on every block, at home was the past and back there I was out of luck. Joy filled my heart as hope shook my hand. I met my type, immediately fell back in love with life. We held hands in public as people giggled, we didn't care as we displayed out exotic outfit. Females envied our sense of fashion as our hands sway with the wind's direction. I now realise that as time goes, people begin to adapt and welcome what they once hated and rejected.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Niall Madden]

Really good the writing is great and love the comment on the understanding of sex and sexuality, great work.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked how you described a hard topic. World is far from perfect on understanding sex and need. A lot of fear in some places. Very dangerous not to fit the norm. I feel the world had fell backwards on understanding of what is right or wrong? I believe what we need and want in the locked doors of our house. Is our business. Powerful powerful. Create thoughts and a long conversation.
Coyote

[Olumegbon]

You've rightly said it all. Thanks so much.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[wordman]

most gay people are fun to be around,so it`s out of the bag now you feel better good story

[Olumegbon]

I totally agree with you. Thanks a lot.

[wordman]

you're welcome

[GeraldFIngBurke]

Some of the rhyming feels a bit forced. (bold ring, g-string, huge moodswing, etc...) It also feels like the words have been dumped on the page with little care. Restructuring and reconsidering some of your word choice would help this quite a bit. It's a heavy topic, but an important one. Personal experience always serves these things well. I like the theme and the mood, but the things I mentioned before break the vibe for me. Good luck on a possible revision, I would love to read it.

[Olumegbon]

I really appreciate your review and I've noted the mistakes, thanks a lot. Be expecting something better soon

[GeraldFIngBurke]

Meter and structure can be learned, conveying thought and emotion in a meaningful way is a bit trickier. You have what you need to be really good. All you have to do is work on your form and you'll really have something.

[Andrew Dane Parker]

One word: beautiful. It's so inspiring that you write about things like this and feel ashamed or embarrassed. You deserve a round of applause. Just. Good job.

[Olumegbon]

I know right, I guess that's the beauty of writing. Thanks a lot.

[MsJewel]

Your words are deeply personal and I'm certain will be an inspiration for others.
As far as your poetry form, you have a nice rhythm and rhyme flow. It would be a little easier to read if you broke up the lines a bit - giving impact to some of the lines that are quite powerful, but a bit hidden.
Great work!

:) Julie

[Olumegbon]

Thanks so much, I really appreciate. Note taken.

[Gee]

Live and let live my friend,we are all what we are.Like what you've written,although my personal preference is for poems to be set out stacked in lines(there's probably a term for that but if so I ain't got a clue to the name)Take care

[Olumegbon]

Thanks so much for your comment, appreciate.

[Gee]

You're welcome

[Eagergreen]

In my head each time I read a poem is see a tempo like a meternome this was quite a nice image as I read yours because it was different more like a dance than a meternome I like things that make me feel different therefore I like your poem keep writing with this varying speed just don't give us whiplash :)

[Olumegbon]

Thanks so much, I really appreciate.