Rat Race

Life's course 

Is a misguided trail 

of caravans 

fixed to the back of many vans 

Some retro 

Some modern 

Some expensive 

And others stolen 

One or two cutting the chase 

Jumping red lights 

And risking fate 

few cautious ones 

are looking left and right 

forward and backward 

each time they take a flight..

I am unhappy 

Because mine's attached to thousand tails 

of some stinky rodents 

I am my friends 

engaged in a Rat-Race..

  

Reviews

[Tom]

So creative and imaginative, the idea of comparing life's journey to a caravan being towed by a motor vehicle that can veer off in any number of directions is very clever; pure poetic magic ! It makes one think, wouldn't it be nice to step away from the rat race and retreat to a more sedentary, idyllic lifestyle? ( if only )!

Quality poem !

[Onku Ghosh]

Wonderfully penned thoughts and a very interesting write.I loved the endng''I am unhappy/ because mine is attached to a thousand tails/ Of some stinky rodents/I am my friends/ engaged in a rat race."Too good.This goes to my library.

[bluessadmood]

that was wonderful ,how it applies to life ,to all
each engaged in his own means of transport,most are stolen
lots expensive,repulsive,while poor others are lagging
always pulling in the back,and will stay there all the way
yes what a dirty rat race,they say its only logical this way
but no,it should never be like that,for humans with any brains
lovely write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we need to take a different mode of transportation and go down a different highway...

the one most are traveling on, is too hectic and no one is enjoying the scenery.

like this piece, lots.

[Pete Langley]

This is a tricky one to fathom. I like the metaphor, of the confusion of the journey. I feel you`ve rather lost your way, following the whims and agendas of others and need to park up for a while in you own space. I have to say that I find the poem a little disjointed and incomplete ....which probably accurately describes what you`re saying. P.