Life's a B***h

Experimental!

Life's a B***h

Thriller in the chiller

with a killer punch,

taking on the cowboys,

guess I'm out to lunch.

Holed beneath the water

line, looks like I'm sunk,

that is what you get

if you get me drunk.

I danced the night away

with a red hot chick,

she said she liked me too

so I kissed her quick.

Shotgun at the wedding,

guess I failed to duck,

but that's just what happens

when you're out of luck.

Learning lessons daily,

not so good at maths,

going round in circles

but on the wrong paths.

 

12/06/17

Reviews

[pia]

Amazing poem !!! And concepts. Even the way this was worded was wonderful. It had nice rhythm to it as well. Good job !!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Pia.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

It so is! Rhythmic, percussive, funny poem.Great rhyme and visuals-"Holed beneath the water line, looks like I'm sunk"-Ha! Can this actually be a J.A.M.- RAP?? Yes! Love it John!
P.S. Yup- You sure did "fail to duck"!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Annette it was just one for fun. Now this is the one and only rap i have ever attempted:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Passion8/1008953/

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

I'm on my way to find it John. I think you have a future in it....Great fun!

[Carol Cashes]

Brilliant! "Shotgun at the wedding,
guess I failed to duck" and "going round in circles
but on the wrong paths." Gems. Good job. Putting circles and paths together. Like the concept. Thanks for a good read.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Carol.