Bewitchment

three words..

                  

What do i do
how do i live
breathe
sleep
eat
lie
talk
dream
scheme
die

Did i
push you away?
was i
too clingy?
when i
said those
three
little
words
"I
love
you"
did i scare you?

Sometimes
i frighten myself
too
on nights
when the
moon
is full
i do have this habit
of saying
I
Love
You

I do think you
bewitched me
 

Author's Note

Some people are a little or a lot intimidated by the words, ' i love you' ..

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

I like this write...often times two people see the same relationship so differently...and when what we perceive as a great relationship ends, we are sometimes left to wonder...why? what went wrong? It's those questions that can haunt us and become our baggage almost more than the heartache of a failed relationship. Always second guessing ourselves in future relationships...losing some of the freedom to just be ourselves.

laura

[Lionel Braud]

like the brief dialogue in this poem, really hits on the brevity and depth of relationships, the structure hits home for me too because if fits the transistory nature of relationships, and yes it does a have a Plath ring to it.

[Bernie Shelton]

I think that the previous reviews have said most that can be said, a good write with the little warning! beware of those three little words.
Bernie

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

it's beautifully written... thanks for sharing

[Greg the Bard]

The style caught my eye and kept it through the read. Of course my mine was in the gutter. Hagar hush! OK but she has a prettky picture. HAGAR. The style is wonderful and the compactness of the write fit it well. I don't see the last line being a problem. I think Hagar has fallen for you. The ending tells all and is very well thought out. Good write

[*** Hey Jude***]

Isn't it funny how we sometimes think we did the wrong thing by expressing our emotions. Let love live, love comes in many forms. Keep loving~ ~ Jude xo

[T. L. O'Neal]

This is so true; you really do have to watch out about saying that because you can't take it back. In the heat of the moment people feel it at that time but it doesn't necessarily make it so. I think it's best to take a wait and see approach and give it a while. It's hard at times but in the end you're better of. Good write. T

[Stacy A. Foster]

Nice, easy flow to follow and the message is clear. There is that mystery with some relationships that seem to suddenly go stale after those three little words are said. There's nothing worse than hearing silence after saying it to another. What a nightmare! I think I've said those words long ago and later wondered why I even said them. Sometimes we think what we feel is love but it really isn't. And if someone leaves after hearing it, I say, begone!

Cheers,
Stacy :)

[Blackbirdsong]

Some people say those words too easily and then want to take them back...they become like a weapon and other times we're bewitched for whatever reason, the moon, something and we say it then wish we hadn't. You've captured these feelings well here. Perfectly even. I know sometimes I wonder about myself. I do have this knack for loving the wrong people and being completely happy until I wake up. :)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Some people are afraid of those three little words and will turn and run for fear of being hurt by them. Thank you for sharing. debileah