Mama?

i miss my mama and so many others they left this Earth too soon wish they were here!!!!

Hello Mama
can you hear me, Mama?
can you see me Mama?

I feel you near me at times
smell you even so I know...

Yes is the answer

Am I making you proud, Mama?
Am I making you sad, Mama?


I am doing the best I can Mama
you were taken from me too soon
Mama

I was afraid and so lonely when you
first went away Mama

I love you Mama I miss saying your name
Mama

Mama I love you
Happy Mother's Day
from me to you in Heaven

So blessed am I to have a mama like you
sweet Mama

Author's Note

i just wanted to say happy mothers day to my mama
not good but from the heart

Reviews

[Creepy Swine Guy]

It says a lot. Tells the reader how obviously sorely you miss your mother. Did you lose her when you were very young? I think it is good. I think that the word "Mama" either tells us how young you were when you lost her ... or how young and vulnerable losing her made you feel.

It feels very VERY personal.

[Hamkar]

So truthful, I wanted to see this poem because I was interested in your use of 'Mama'.

[Harley Ann]

I love it.
"Am I making you proud, Mama?
Am I making you sad, Mama?"
A baby crying out for Mama...
The only one that'll love you no matter what, and she's gone.
:(
P.S. I was drawn to your profile by the Emilie Autumn picture. This proves it wasn't a bad decision! :D
Great write though

[Devons]

It's really interesting how this poem -almost like a song- plays on the Mama motif all along really beautifully and how she is missed so much - and then at the end there's that line "So blessed am I to have a mama like you"... Really intriguing how that alters the perspective of the piece in a strange way. I think this a really effective poem if only for the way it lyrically and tenderly plays 'Mama' around the lines (and that isn't the only reason why it is effective). A tender and artistic tribute.


PS. couldn't help thinking of the Genesis song 'Mama'...

[Crowley]

No review here on that one....really nice. All props to mom.

[Soul Magic✯]

*sighs* this one definitely hits home. beautifully written from the heart and soul. i can relate to the same feeling. she's smiling from above and so proud of you. thanks for sharing this wonderful piece

[Melissa]

From the heart IS the heart of this poem. I love the simplicity of it because it is that child within that is missing her mama so much. It's beautiful and you can bet your bottom dollar that she is supremely proud of her little girl. xo

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

It IS good BECAUSE it is from your heart. I understand and feel your every word here. Such a nice way to honor her memory.

~True

[MissWordSmith]

i almost cried. my mom and i, we don't agree on everything, but she's my angel.
and if i were to lose her, i don't know what i'd do.
i'm so sorry for your loss..
and this wasn't ''not good''
it was from the heart, and THUS it WAS good. really, it was so touching. i have a lump in my throat right now

[Gandré]

Thanks good mothers we are aware of woman’s right to decide what happens to her body surely extends to give love rather than expect love. Freud had noted that the parents are frequently symbolized in adult dreams by the figures of king and queen. I think, when I speak of myself, he was partially right. This was a wonderful small poem.

[An owl on the moon]

This is a tender, moving write... You express your love and longing for your mother in such a sweetly moving, honest way. I miss my mama too, and could relate so well to your words.