Opaque Possibilities

A prose poem written for Albert's Cafe Ten Word challenge using: BOX, REMAINS, PROJECT, OUTSIDE, FOREVER, MORE, VASE, ACT, ILLUSION, BREATHING

 

Opaque Possibilities   Is breathing simply an act  that keeps our warm remains outside the wooden box, or is it an illusion  separating the dying  from those already dead? Are we part of a project called life or merely a dried flower in a vase, more for show than purpose,  forever void of feeling real or thinking far beyond the mortal wall that clouds the view of eternity? By Sharon Miller Bolander    © 2008 Peggy Paris (All rights reserved)

Reviews

[Susan S.]

Now, see? That is a free form poem. I go crazy when people write a treatise or essay or something and then break it up into stanzas so they can call it poetry! It isn't fooling anybody.

Your piece has the feel of being thought out line by line--did it help or hinder you to have to use specific words? Putting such constraints on what I write seems to help me. It makes me think harder and plan things out rather than letting it all come tumbling out. Because if this, the work ends up being stronger.

Bravo on this one.

[SilentDream]

Wonderful job :)
((Hugs and LOve)) ~SilentDream

[Tovli]

very nicely done--asking questions, stirring for answers! enjoyed. tovli