Creationist's Perfection

Creationist's Perfection

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic

An abomination of perversion;

Like birds to nest,

Tempted I find myself

To succumb to this starlit gaze.


The distance shortens continuously;

Anticipation is misery,

But promise of what awaits

Might disenchant my malady.


You have stirred the cells in me

And they left a trace of regret:

Forever I have questioned divinities,

Yet there may be no other explanation

For the bestowment of this beauty.


Pitiful I am, sincerely;

You embrace it humbly,

For this world we created

Is where you desire to remain.


Dishonesty aches me now;

It is by me you've been deceived,

As our eden would fall apart

By a mere stroke of hand


The truth that I have withheld

Is a truth I concealed from myself:

You exist inside my deluded mind,

And only there shall you ever live,

For abomination am I.

© 2013 Tomislav Petricevic


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I liked the whole body of this... but what stands out is the beginning and end line that finish this verses:

An abomination of perversion;
For abomination am I.

Just those two lines can give a lot to the reader... do not get me wrong... the embodiment of the write fits... just those two lines stuck with me...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomislav Petricevic

6 Years Ago

Yeah, I wanted those two to be something like "punchlines" for the poem.
Thanks! :)
Glen Yumang Manese

6 Years Ago

I guess that in the lines... I would put them in bold print and give them impact... really give the .. read more
Tomislav Petricevic

6 Years Ago

Nah, I never mess with the font of my poems. Putting it in bold would somehow tell the reader where .. read more



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I liked the whole body of this... but what stands out is the beginning and end line that finish this verses:

An abomination of perversion;
For abomination am I.

Just those two lines can give a lot to the reader... do not get me wrong... the embodiment of the write fits... just those two lines stuck with me...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomislav Petricevic

6 Years Ago

Yeah, I wanted those two to be something like "punchlines" for the poem.
Thanks! :)
Glen Yumang Manese

6 Years Ago

I guess that in the lines... I would put them in bold print and give them impact... really give the .. read more
Tomislav Petricevic

6 Years Ago

Nah, I never mess with the font of my poems. Putting it in bold would somehow tell the reader where .. read more
good job old tom my friend (what's with the 25 character limit these days?)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Invisible

6 Years Ago

I can only leave reviews or review comments when there's 25 characters or more
Tomislav Petricevic

6 Years Ago

Maybe they did that to encourage people to give more constructive reviews? But I don't see why revie.. read more
Invisible

6 Years Ago

I don't either, but I don't understand a lot of things websites do these days, especially writerscaf.. read more

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Added on July 22, 2013
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Tags: creationist's perfection, lost, mind, illusion, false, hope, delusion, abomination

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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Hello! I used to write all about myself in this section, but now that I think about it - what does it matter? This is a website for writing, and that's what we should focus on. We shouldn't let oth.. more..

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