Whispers from Below

A man is disappointed in people who betrayed him, so he also becomes vunerable to evil influences...

So weak you feel like giving up,

There's no more blood in your white cup,

'till they were full they kept drinking,

While your dry body continued sinking.

What's the use of fighting, you now ask?

Speak no words, I'll hand you over this mask,

And a silver dagger for your hands, sharp instead of blunt,

Tread among the land, for it is the beginning of your hunt.

First night, you're still weak and insecure,

But every kill makes you more and more sure,

The blood on the floor contains forgotten verses of psalms,

As their still beating heart sits in the crimsonness of your palms.

A loyal servant you have been, so go and kill some more,

To my residence down below, you'll always have a door,

Infernal flames do not care, for whose souls they embrace,

Painful satisfaction they provide, with a quickening pace.

After weeks of doing my bidding, you begin to wonder,

Is there a purpose of continuing, since you sent so many under?

But before you can run away, before you can even yell,

I pull you down alongside me, into the fiery depths of hell.

Author's Note

Just a little story I developed in my head about Satan tricking people into believing he's their ally, and then still betraying them in the end.
And no, I'm not a satanist. So screw you if you still think I am.

Reviews

[R.A. Youngblood]

Predobra je pjesma, mračna i duboka, nije uopće tako " ne posebna" kao što si rekao, neznam ali podsjeća me na to kao da slušaš neki dead metal ili da si emo, kao da si neki mračnjak ili nešto.. ali svaka čast, pjesma je ipak savršena, vidim da si nekako dručiji od nekih npr, koji pišu pjesme o životu i kakvi su zapravo u životu... a čak ni ja nisam katkad takva.. sve kitice su mi super, stvarno je moćna pjesma kao iz pakla... "Thanks for sharing"..aaahah.. (;

[Tomislav Petricevic]

My grammar needs work...? Whaaaaaaaaaat? I'm sorry, but you speak nonsense. A few commas have been placed somewhere where they perhaps shouldn't have been, but that's just because I wanted them to leave an impact on the rhythm. Sure, maybe I could have even written "you begin wondering" but I didn't want to write it like that, and a poet has his freedom in writing. So I don't know what the hell are you talking about. Maybe you're the one who could work on his grammar?
To all others - I appreciate your support.

[She of Three Personalit..]

Yes...It's true. I like the realistic qualities of this!

[Suditi]

Wow.
Thats one hell of a story.
So dark. And interesting.
It brings out a real human trait in a bold manner.
Amazing write.

[Desmund Tiny]

sometimes people get desperate....... I know how it feels...... I can relate to this..... great work