Fireworks Drummer

Fireworks Drummer

A Poem by Ph.D in Victory
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I know I'm late, but this is just a little something I did for the 4th of July, enjoy! Check out my other poems if you like this one.

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The Fireworks Drummer is now here, 
Banging his drums for all to hear 
As the night draws near
In this seventh hour, 
He bangs his drums with enormous power
This makes his fireworks louder and louder, 
But if they're too loud, 
Please don't run and cower, 
Because the magic fireworks he uses
Make a visual masterpiece 
Please, come next to me and see 
What you witness with your eyes, 
You will not believe 
But as the night begins to cease, 
Everyone goes back inside, 
And anxiously wait for next 4th of July

© 2010 Ph.D in Victory


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Ph.D in Victory
I'm only 12 so don't be too harsh. Please review :)

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Not bad. The first stanza through to the middle part, it had a nice rhythmic flow and I like where you were going but then you stopped. The last parts of the piece was visually pleasing and creative, but I if you are going to have this cool rhythmic flow stay with it through the rest of the poem. I like your choice of words though and personally, it’s never to late to pay tribute to the 4th of July! Good work.
God bless : )


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Aw it's so pretty! I can imagine the fireworks go up and lit up the sky. ;)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very clever. You have quite the imagination and story projecting talent.
Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simply beautiful You Paint a lovely masterpiece Here.BRAVO god bless lily

Posted 9 Years Ago


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nice original poem..your descriptions were point on..

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fun and original manner in which to describe the holiday~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not bad. The first stanza through to the middle part, it had a nice rhythmic flow and I like where you were going but then you stopped. The last parts of the piece was visually pleasing and creative, but I if you are going to have this cool rhythmic flow stay with it through the rest of the poem. I like your choice of words though and personally, it’s never to late to pay tribute to the 4th of July! Good work.
God bless : )


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a unique way of describing fireworks.
you started off with a rhyme scheme, but changed
to prose (don't fret, I've done the same thing).
overall I like this ' Fireworks Drummer '



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Ph.D in Victory
Ph.D in Victory

Mill Creek, WA



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