Rejection

Speaks for itself ............

Rejection

Reciprocation

Not part of the agenda

Smashed my fragile heart

Phillozofee @ 2017

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I like the way you approach this from a "negation" point of view (it's NOT this) . . . my only suggestion is that the last line could be pumped up ("left" is a verb that conveys nothing & "broken heart" is cliché). Just an idea: "my busted heart bleeds" (making it more personal & graphic maybe). Just an idea . . . (((HUGS)))

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Yes .. I see what you mean ... so ... hope you approve of the amendment! :-)

[barleygirl]

Ah yes! Love it! Much more dynamic & intensely stated! Great fix! (((HUGS)))

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Thank you - hugs right back at you!!!!!!!!

[EcstaticEuphoria]

I love reading these tiny "micro" poems I like to call them. We are all obsessed in this country with the "new" concept that less is more and living tiny. I think the lesson to be learned here is that everything less can certainly be more when skill and precision is used to create something so tiny and yet speak to everyone. Love it, as always!

[Ken Simm.]

It was said that Matisse could draw a perfect portrait with five lines. you can obviously tell a complete story with three.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Oh no! Who hurt you?? Well, the good that came of it is this beautiful, haunting, poignant, perfect Senryu. "Agenda"?-we don't need no stinking agenda! Right?? Be brave and Love on my dear Phill! Stunning.

[Fran Marie]

Packs a powerful punch of sadness and sorrow.. precise and to the point..deeply expressed piece of poetry so very well penned

[Great Aunt Astri]

You portray the feeling of love not returned very poignantly in you haiku. Yes, it does speak for itself - very well. The silhouetted image goes well with it too.

[S. S. Allen]

Wow. Very concise piece of writing depicting so much pain. Love it.

[emmajoy]

A sadness of writing... but, strangely haunting.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Like a grape
I was..
Never going to get over it.

Sigh..

J.J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the changes...good suggestions by barleygirl...

i also like the double meaning i took from this...yes, the romantic efforts as one...but also the lack of reciprocation among writers and can also break a fragile heart...or rather, "smash it"---

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Rejection is the most ugly and annoying phase of life. You've summed it all in 3perfect phrases.
Intense!