~Intruder~

Sound the alarm you are gettting to close to my heart...

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Intruder

You entered my heart unannounced
And turned my world upside down
Leaving me only guessing
Why didn�t the alarm go off in my head?
Or at least in my heart?
I start thinking to myself
�This must be right because
There�s nothing to tell me it�s wrong��
My heart�s been torn, broken, and scarred
Ripped out by the last person that I let in
I pledged to never let anyone in again.
Then you came along�
You changed my mind
With your sincere words
And genuine touch�
You made me feel safe
I find myself falling for you
Escaping from misery
While you introduce me to paradise
You unlock all of my doors
And tear down old barriers
With your bare hands.
You help me rebuild
The ruins inside of me�
I let you break into my heart
Because I know
This is where you belong�

Reviews

[Reuben Porter]

I like this poem, it tells us that we are all vulnerable and that it is possible for someone to break into our lives. Once into our lives it is possible for them to help us rebuild ourselves from a pain we have, or they can either make it worse. Very good poem, thanks for the read request, I apologize for taking so long to get to it.

[wizthom]

not bad ,not bad at all

[Brandon]

Very nicely done. I know exactly how you feel to have your heart basically ripped from you, but you just got to move on.

[Kevon]

i like it , It's subject is obvious but it is not obviously written

[Sexy Jones]

"You made me feel safe
I find myself falling for you
Escaping from misery
While you introduce me to paradise
You unlock all of my doors
And tear down old barriers
With your bare hands.
You help me rebuild
The ruins inside of me� "

That is exactly how I feel about my fiance.
My last relationship was over the course of almost 10 years and during it my life had become so painful that when Jarel got me back and made me feel again, I felt safe. I was able to forget about that past and begin a new future.

Great write.
Loved it.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

fantastic piece - i love this - especially the ending - perfect

[Sparrow]

WOW!

I had tried to write a poem expressing the same thing not long ago (Infiltrated was the result) but wow you are just so...eloquent. It's perfection in being able to relay what's inside your soul to the outside world. There are some very heartfelt emotions in here that any reader can see. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

sometimes we don't know the trouble we're in until it catches up to us.


Great Write.
Rayne

[OneLove68]

that is outstanding- outlining the hope of new love...

[Robert Luna]

What a great piece of work here to allow some one to gain access to your inner being is both scary and exciting. The new feeling that return and the ones that are new all on their own is both wonderful and inspirational to have overcome you. This was wonderful and a pleasant read.


Well DOne!!!!!