Nobody's Happy

The world just isn't content with life.

Nobody's happy anymore

Nobody's laughing

Nobody wants to smile.

They say that life's not fair

But they only count what they don't have.

Nobody's content

They're all angry

Leering, jeering, complaining.

"I deserve better!"

"I want it!"

"Life's not good to me!"

"And nobody cares about it..."

It's all about them

All about what they don't have

A secluded, unhappy bubble

Which they stay in by choice.

"Look!" they say. "They've got it better.

"And I'm down on luck."

But there's so much more

Than wants and needs.

There's always someone

More unfortunate than they.

They eat well

And have shelter

Most people in the world

Do not have running water

But still they say,

"I want more."

They get more, and they say,

"Even more."

They can't be satisfied.

Nobody's happy anymore.

Author's Note

I'm super bad at poetry... please help me improve this. I know there's something wrong with it, but I can't quite put my finger on it!

Reviews

[Puzzle-bot]

It's good; I agree that not everybody is content with life!

[NotYourChinaDoll]

I love your lines "They say that life's not fair but the only count what they don't have". This poem is very true. Once people get the "one thing" they want, there is suddenly and new "one thing".
I've found that the only way to get better at writing is from practice and reading other work. I wrote a bunch of "meh" poems before I finally wrote one I really liked. You might want to try writing in some sort of structure rather than just free verse. For example, you could have a rhymes or put the lines into stanzas. Not to toot my own horn but when I wrote my poem China Doll I tried writing with a real structure for the first time. Though you would think that would make it harder, for me it actually made it easier to have an idea what needed to come next to fit the structure. Just a suggestion.
I really do like this poem. It gets your point across. Sorry this is so long. Keep it up!!

[Michelle Lea]

I think it was a nice write! The arrangement of the wording and the flow was nice. I really don't see anything wrong with it and I have to agree no-one's every happy with what they have....."its always more, more, more and More! lol

[Dalaina Renee]

I enjoyed this. It is kind of like a metaphore. Nobody is somebody here. Your doing good so far! Keep at it!

[Sheila Kline]

Hey.....to me this is more like a story, than a poem.....it has a wonderful message, but it runs together....would you want to try editing it? With some spacing, and rearranging, I think it could be a decent poem.....just a different format.
Let's see what others say about it. If you would like for me to help you, I would be glad to.
....perhaps written/presented with a different perspective. Does that make sense to you?
That's what we are here for!
Hugs, Sheila