Walking through Fire

 

 

I will through fire for you.

Just to see you face

Even as my flesh begin to burn and smell

I will not stop, because I can’t imagine my life without you.

So I will keep walking just see you smile and to hear you laugh

I walk through fire and let everything burn  

Author's Note

please ignore the grammar mistakes

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Reminded me of "Walk through the Fire" by Joss Whedon in "Once More With Feeling" Buffy the Vampire Slayer S7/Ep6. Good use of emotion, it was well displayed and the imagery is both beautiful and grim, well done. I wish I could ignore those grammar mistakes... but I can't, I'm an editor and I think it's a good thing when people point out those mistakes because it furthers you as a writer so...

In the second line you should have "your face" instead of "you face." And in the third line, "begin" should be plural = "begins".

Overall, a very decent poem, well done!

[Abigail T]

Whoa. I'm always amazed at short pieces that convey such powerful emotion and feeling. This is a piece that does it. So beautiful and a little creepy. Perfect!

[A.A.Romanczuk]

This is phenomenal Quan...truly....I feel the power of Your sentiment...lovely...the idea of burning for someone...fire is one of the more powerful elements...Great piece

[Mrs.Sophrosyne]

This makes me think of the opening song to the TV show The Unit. Evokes a lot of powerful emotions even with these few words. I enjoyed this

[Zane Furtado]

It makes me vividly imagine somebody walking through flames to a loved one, but burning before they get there. A touch of sadness and a streak of anger, I absolutely love it.

[Cherry Blossom]

thats how feel about my kids love it

[Tainted Devotion]

Very nicely done. The grammar you can worry about later. You are doing a magnificent job with your talent as a writer. It speaks to those who read it, and it holds such a powerful meaning. Nicely done indeed.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

i love the way this poem was written...the way it can connect to peoples hearts and inspire them, good job!

[nono]

Yup and be sure when you walk you walk with pride and that the fire heat can't even take you down nice job!! I like this a lot I'm putting it in my favorites this is beautiful. Short, but as I've been told sometimes the shortest poem is the most beautiful and that's true. Nice job!

[Michael X]

wow, stunning job on application, the ending speaks volumes, the entire piece gives a unique perspective on desire, an ode to the smile and that it can inspire in the heart and this poem represents a love that represents itself as endless, and the form reciprocates the feeling by being to the point in avery detailed manner, awsome job on this, thanks for sharing your talent.