Chapter One

 

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Author's Note

I've never written anything like this before. Please critique harshly. Thanks.

Reviews

[mick weller]

"Hill, I feel ok now," I announce. (I don't think `I announce` is necessary?)
I'm quite into Hill before he disbelieves in a sixth sense...
Love it - `common sense` as a seventh sense!
...but then more is revealed about Hill (as a charlatan?)
I like the idea of the Levels and the Glossary (of absolute learning?)
hmm this is intriguing...

[zig]

doh!!! ok, ill wait. let me know when its back up

[Hedra Helix]

argh!!

[Hedra Helix]

ooo I just read this! send it to me read request cos I dont wanna chance forget it! Im stoked youre doing this, ill critique and praise equally to siut merit, I just cant cos i gotta go,...but yay this is cool! stoked on ya;)

send to me?

[L.V. Ana]

This is interesting. It leaves the reader wondering what's going on enough to make them keep reading, but at the same time explains just enough that they don't feel like they're floundering in the dark. The first paragraph wasn't an immediate catcher, but once you get past that you can really get into the story. It's very well written with good word choice. I'm curious about these rituals...